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On the Beach At Dusk

On the beach at dusk, you say that someone has thrown sand into the sky, and please won't I sweep it away so you can play awhile longer with your sand castles and little plastic boats. You are confident I can do anything, and, Son, I've always tried. But even I cannot hold back the night. Darkness closes in around us, and for the first time you look up at me, and see that I'm not God! _____________________ For your best free verse poem SKAT A/ Contest

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Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 7/27/2015 11:12:00 PM

Awesome pen Darlene! Powerful words n wonderful expressions n here u r wid great win dear! Big congrats!

Darlene Gifford
Date: 7/31/2015 7:11:00 PM

Thanks, I appreciate your kind words about my poem. And congrats to you also, Dr. Upma, on your winning haiku "Hailstorm. I enjoyed reading it.

Njeri Hunjeri

Date: 7/27/2015 1:53:00 AM

Wow this is well penned. I love this poem. This goes on my pile of favorites. God bless you Darlene and may you continue what you do. #7. And congrats!

Darlene Gifford
Date: 7/27/2015 8:17:00 AM

Thanks, njeri, I appreciate that and for your friendship.

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 7/26/2015 12:29:00 AM

This is so sweet and memorable Darlene. I can relate and loved this one! Congrats on your wonderful win!

Darlene Gifford
Date: 7/26/2015 3:55:00 AM

Thanks, Connie. Memories are everything!

Robert Lindley

Date: 7/25/2015 10:58:00 PM

Beautiful poem and sometimes we parents are Gods to our children, in a way only they can see. Congrats on a fine win. A7

Darlene Gifford
Date: 7/25/2015 11:41:00 PM

Thank you, Robert, and your comments are so true! Thanks for the 7. Congratson your free verse high win as well!

Skat A

Date: 7/25/2015 10:55:00 PM

Darlene. Congratulations on your awesome win. Love SKAT

Darlene Gifford
Date: 7/25/2015 11:45:00 PM

Thanks for the win, SKAT, And Gary, now in heaven, I know is pleased Hugs, ~~Darlene

Alexis Y.

Date: 7/25/2015 7:40:00 PM

Darlene, l glad this heartfelt piece made the winner's list. Congrations on your win:-) Alexis

Alexis Y.
Date: 7/25/2015 11:54:00 PM

Thanks Darlene, l welcome new friendships.:-) Alexis

Darlene Gifford
Date: 7/25/2015 11:49:00 PM

Thank you for your comments that are so much appreciated, Alexis. I consider you won of my poetry friends. ~~~Darlene

Darlene Gifford

Date: 3/18/2015 6:23:00 PM

It always is a blessing to hear how one of my poems has been perceived by others. Thank you! My little boy died when he was 13 of cystic fibrosis. So this poem is especially poignant to me remembering the special moments like this one spent at the beach with him. Thank you for bringing this memory back to me.