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I wrote verse on the wings of a lark romantic phrases in perfect rhyme but the lark flew away in the dark I wrote no further for the longest time A lone blue jay landed upon my lawn I wrote sweet prose on his sapphire wings He spent the night with me, but at dawn the jay flew away and no longer sings I answered the call of a beautiful raven I wrote love sonnets on his ebony wings He stayed for years in my safe haven I was one of the raven's castoff things I no longer trust those who take flight I lost them all and my torn heart bled On restless wings I'll never again write of love that leaves me alone in my bed

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Afzal Nusker

Date: 8/4/2017 12:49:00 PM

Wow... this is so creatively crafted, Lin. Congrats on your win.

Lin Lane
Date: 8/4/2017 3:48:00 PM

Thank you kindly, Afzal.

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 8/3/2017 6:52:00 PM

Excellent write! Congrats, Lin! Lovely and sad.

Lin Lane
Date: 8/4/2017 3:47:00 PM

Thanks very much, Kim.

Susan Ashley

Date: 8/3/2017 5:27:00 PM

Hi Lin, beautifully done. Congratulations!

Lin Lane
Date: 8/3/2017 5:39:00 PM

Thanks ever so much, Susan.

Agnes Krampe

Date: 8/3/2017 3:20:00 PM

Lin, this is so lovely and haunting. I missed it when you first posted it and am very glad it came to light again on the winners list - congrats.

Lin Lane
Date: 8/3/2017 5:39:00 PM

Thank you very much, Agnes. You haven't missed a thing. lol

Funom Makama

Date: 7/12/2017 9:28:00 AM

Excellent and profound. You have that unique skill of beating the peak. This is a wonderful stuff, always beating our expectation. Can wait to jump to your next page.

Lin Lane
Date: 7/12/2017 10:32:00 AM

Thanks for the copy/paste comment.

Chris Green

Date: 7/10/2017 5:48:00 PM

This was fantastic Lin. I like how you did this, though sad it spoke to me. There have been so many who have flown away, quietly in the dark of night and each and every time it hurt. I probably uttered a few, "I'll never write agains" only to look out the window and see another resting on the lawn. This was really good.

Lin Lane
Date: 7/10/2017 6:04:00 PM

Thank you very much.

Charlie Smith

Date: 7/10/2017 2:19:00 PM

Now we know how your feather bed came to be. Well tweeted, my Dear...

Lin Lane
Date: 7/10/2017 6:03:00 PM

Charlie, your clever comment made me laugh. Thanks, dear one.

Ilene Bauer

Date: 7/9/2017 3:58:00 PM

great title and excellent rhyme! i like this one very much, lin...

Lin Lane
Date: 7/9/2017 6:16:00 PM

Thanks for the kind comments, Ilene.

Heidi Sands

Date: 7/9/2017 1:35:00 PM

This is very well written Lin. :)

Lin Lane
Date: 7/9/2017 6:15:00 PM

Thanks, Heidi.

Tim Smith

Date: 7/9/2017 1:24:00 PM

Very nice poetic flair.

Lin Lane
Date: 7/9/2017 6:15:00 PM

Thanks, Tim.

Jan Allison

Date: 7/9/2017 1:04:00 PM

Oh Lin this is so sad and so beautifully written. It would seen all the birds have flown the nest but they were all turkeys disguised as a lark, jay and raven, may the next one be a dove of peace:-) hugs jan xx into faves:-)

Lin Lane
Date: 7/9/2017 6:15:00 PM

There will be no more birds, Jan...and 2 was more than enough...I just threw in a third because I wanted a 4th verse and I like to pick on ravens.

Daniel Turner

Date: 7/9/2017 11:42:00 AM

Lin, all BS aside, I am the type of person, when someone does something well, it makes me happy for them and I try hard not to covet but the way you construct poems is extraordinary, and i find myself coveting your skills. This is a compliment to your skill set. A most relatable poem:)

Lin Lane
Date: 7/9/2017 6:14:00 PM

Thank you. You know if I thought it was BS I'd not be replying to you.

Dale Gregory Cozart

Date: 7/9/2017 11:04:00 AM

This is gentle and very softly spoken. a fave.

Lin Lane
Date: 7/9/2017 6:13:00 PM

Thank you very much, Dale.

James Marshall Goff

Date: 7/9/2017 10:55:00 AM

Love the connection (leaps) of love & nature, Lin! to me...more like beautiful Persian Poetry! ...giving me, the reader...your physical movement of feelings easily felt! to my faves!

Lin Lane
Date: 7/9/2017 6:13:00 PM

Thank you, James. That's quite a nice compliment.