Lin Lane Poet Rhyme

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On Restless Wings

I wrote verse on the wings of a lark
romantic phrases in perfect rhyme
but the lark flew away in the dark
I wrote no further for the longest time

A lone blue jay landed upon my lawn
I wrote sweet prose on his sapphire wings
He spent the night with me, but at dawn
the jay flew away and no longer sings

I answered the call of a beautiful raven
I wrote love sonnets on his ebony wings
He stayed for years in my safe haven
I was one of the raven's castoff things

I no longer trust those who take flight
I lost them all and my torn heart bled
On restless wings I'll never again write
of love that leaves me alone in my bed

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Afzal Nusker August 4, 2017 at 12:49 PM Wow... this is so creatively crafted, Lin. Congrats on your win. Lin Lane August 4, 2017 at 3:48 PM Thank you kindly, Afzal.

Kim Rodrigues August 3, 2017 at 6:52 PM Excellent write! Congrats, Lin! Lovely and sad. Lin Lane August 4, 2017 at 3:47 PM Thanks very much, Kim.

Susan Ashley August 3, 2017 at 5:27 PM Hi Lin, beautifully done. Congratulations! Lin Lane August 3, 2017 at 5:39 PM Thanks ever so much, Susan.

Agnes Krampe August 3, 2017 at 3:20 PM Lin, this is so lovely and haunting. I missed it when you first posted it and am very glad it came to light again on the winners list - congrats. Lin Lane August 3, 2017 at 5:39 PM Thank you very much, Agnes. You haven't missed a thing. lol

Funom Makama July 12, 2017 at 9:28 AM Excellent and profound. You have that unique skill of beating the peak. This is a wonderful stuff, always beating our expectation. Can wait to jump to your next page. Lin Lane July 12, 2017 at 10:32 AM Thanks for the copy/paste comment.

Chris Green July 10, 2017 at 5:48 PM This was fantastic Lin. I like how you did this, though sad it spoke to me. There have been so many who have flown away, quietly in the dark of night and each and every time it hurt. I probably uttered a few, "I'll never write agains" only to look out the window and see another resting on the lawn. This was really good. Lin Lane July 10, 2017 at 6:04 PM Thank you very much.

Charlie Smith July 10, 2017 at 2:19 PM Now we know how your feather bed came to be. Well tweeted, my Dear... Lin Lane July 10, 2017 at 6:03 PM Charlie, your clever comment made me laugh. Thanks, dear one.

Ilene Bauer July 9, 2017 at 3:58 PM great title and excellent rhyme! i like this one very much, lin... Lin Lane July 9, 2017 at 6:16 PM Thanks for the kind comments, Ilene.

Heidi Sands July 9, 2017 at 1:35 PM This is very well written Lin. :) Lin Lane July 9, 2017 at 6:15 PM Thanks, Heidi.

Tim Smith July 9, 2017 at 1:24 PM Very nice poetic flair. Lin Lane July 9, 2017 at 6:15 PM Thanks, Tim.

Jan Allison July 9, 2017 at 1:04 PM Oh Lin this is so sad and so beautifully written. It would seen all the birds have flown the nest but they were all turkeys disguised as a lark, jay and raven, may the next one be a dove of peace:-) hugs jan xx into faves:-) Lin Lane July 9, 2017 at 6:15 PM There will be no more birds, Jan...and 2 was more than enough...I just threw in a third because I wanted a 4th verse and I like to pick on ravens.

Daniel Turner July 9, 2017 at 11:42 AM Lin, all BS aside, I am the type of person, when someone does something well, it makes me happy for them and I try hard not to covet but the way you construct poems is extraordinary, and i find myself coveting your skills. This is a compliment to your skill set. A most relatable poem:) Lin Lane July 9, 2017 at 6:14 PM Thank you. You know if I thought it was BS I'd not be replying to you.

Dale Gregory Cozart July 9, 2017 at 11:04 AM This is gentle and very softly spoken. a fave. Lin Lane July 9, 2017 at 6:13 PM Thank you very much, Dale.

James Marshall Goff July 9, 2017 at 10:55 AM Love the connection (leaps) of love & nature, Lin! to me...more like beautiful Persian Poetry! ...giving me, the reader...your physical movement of feelings easily felt! to my faves! Lin Lane July 9, 2017 at 6:13 PM Thank you, James. That's quite a nice compliment.