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On Dying Young

Feel the sea wind cold and stark, as the arrow hits its mark, piercing, pulsing, throbbing heart, can your eyes see in the dark? Thin arms inked with dark tattoos grip the sands of deja vu, earth and ocean rendevous, waves of green and turquoise blue. Soon he would turn twenty-one, dying as the day is done, roulette with a Russian gun, spins the chamber just for fun. In the sea awaits the shark, tide recedes, leaves bloody marks, he murmurs now, his last remark: can your eyes see in the dark? ©Danielle White (Inspired by a young CF patient.)

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009




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Date: 7/30/2009 10:19:00 AM
this was a very beautiful and well written poem...i love how the ending has been repeated....your poems are marvelous and i can't wait for more....Love Faire
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Date: 7/28/2009 5:02:00 PM
Kool poem Danielle, it just flowed and flowed>>James
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Date: 7/28/2009 11:45:00 AM
It was my pleasure to read your excellent piece of poetry today Danielle. Love, Carol
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Date: 7/27/2009 2:31:00 PM
Very well written, and tragic yet inspirational. Nice work.
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Date: 7/27/2009 6:48:00 AM
There are some horrible diseases that aflick mankind. If there could only be cures so there could be hope from those that suffer. I love the way you expressed your feelings here. Sara
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