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On Crimson Hill

He sat on top of the crimson hill Looking, staring, Asking why? Tears fell on blades of grass Like, drops from a bleeding heart He tugged at his torn jeans Reached deep in his pocket Looked at the photo Asking why? Heartbroken, blurred vision, He stood, then stumbled On what felt like shaky ground Wind snapped branches A storm was brewing He stayed there anyway Now, drenched in rain Feeling tattered and torn, He looked down Said, “I love you, forever” To the grave in the ground When the dark clouds parted, He stood in the light… Suddenly, felt a warm embrace A miraculous smile emerged He swore he saw her beside him that night! 8/23/19 Entry for the Wow Me Poetry Contest. Sponsor: Nina Parmenter

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Sandra L. Weiss

Date: 9/22/2019 11:13:00 PM

Beautiful Heidi, winner or not. I think love transcends all planes of existence. If it is the right time and place, the ones who have left us may return to touch our hearts once more. A loving spirit never dies. My opinion only. Loved that ending, or was it?

Heidi Sands
Date: 9/23/2019 1:35:00 PM

Thank you so much Sandy! :)

Paul Callus

Date: 8/31/2019 3:49:00 PM

Yours is a striking, descriptive poem, both in imagery and emotion, Heidi. Such a tender and touching ending! ~ Regards // paul

Heidi Sands
Date: 8/31/2019 5:25:00 PM

Thank you very much Paul. I appreciate your comment :)

M. L. Kiser

Date: 8/27/2019 3:50:00 PM

It's a winner, I think, beautiful imagery and flow to this poem. Good luck in the contest.

Heidi Sands
Date: 8/27/2019 7:29:00 PM

Thank you M.L. , I believe it didn't place ..but I appreciate your kind comment :)

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 8/26/2019 2:03:00 PM

A stunning ending, rich in the "wow" factor Nina wants. Maybe he did see her beside him that night. I woke from sleep to see my mother one night, my late husband another. If I were judging this contest, your entry would rank high. Best wishes in Nina's contest. Hugs, Carolyn PS- Have you been in touch with Sandra Haight?

Heidi Sands
Date: 8/26/2019 2:49:00 PM

Oh, thank you very much Carolyn. I appreciate your support! That is kind of you to say and interesting about you waking up from sleep that way. No, I haven't been in touch with Sandra Haight?

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 8/26/2019 1:54:00 PM

- I believe that we can recognize and have contact with family or friends after death, Heidi - A lovely poem :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Heidi Sands
Date: 8/26/2019 2:49:00 PM

Thank you for your kind visit Anne-Lise :)

Swetha Vangaveti

Date: 8/26/2019 6:12:00 AM

Devastating and then revitalising at the end!! Liked it Heidi. A great write that stirred emotions. :)

Heidi Sands
Date: 8/26/2019 7:07:00 AM

Thank you Swetha. I appreciate your comment on this :)

Ann Gilmour

Date: 8/26/2019 4:56:00 AM

Your beautiful words and emotional ending certainly Wowed me Heidi. Such a moving poem, which in a way I could relate to and I am so glad he saw her that night. Good luck Heidi. With kindest thoughts Ann xx

Heidi Sands
Date: 8/26/2019 7:07:00 AM

Thank you Ann. I appreciate your visit and comment. I hope all is well :)

Nette Onclaud

Date: 8/26/2019 4:00:00 AM

with that element of surprise in the end, you blew me away, heidi...impressive; i see a win for you.. huggs

Heidi Sands
Date: 8/26/2019 7:06:00 AM

Thank you very much Nette :)

Susan Ashley

Date: 8/24/2019 10:34:00 PM

A sadly beautiful poem so tenderly expressed, Heidi. Wonderfully done! Best wishes for a win and warmest wishes for you.. ~Susan

Heidi Sands
Date: 8/25/2019 4:39:00 AM

Oh, thank you so much Susan. I appreciate your kindness :)

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 8/24/2019 7:45:00 PM

A sad but beautiful poem Heidi. She was definitely with him in spirit. I hope this rates high on the winner's list. xxoo

Heidi Sands
Date: 8/25/2019 4:38:00 AM

Yes, she was. Thank you Connie :)

Panagiota Romios

Date: 8/24/2019 11:08:00 AM

Heidi, how moving and well written. Panagiota

Heidi Sands
Date: 8/24/2019 11:11:00 AM

Thank you for your kind comment Panagiota :)

Silent One

Date: 8/24/2019 6:46:00 AM

this is a sad poem, we always yearn for those we lose...

Heidi Sands
Date: 8/24/2019 6:47:00 AM

Yes. Thank you for your visit and comment SO :)

S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri

Date: 8/24/2019 6:18:00 AM

Aw wow so touching and awesomely creative! You express on his behalf in a very poetic soulful way with wonderful imagery enhancing the muse and feel. Kudos for this one of your masterpieces I think. You ought to be proud of this! Pls pleez do review/ comment my newest poem too.

Heidi Sands
Date: 8/24/2019 6:24:00 AM

Thank you for your kind feedback and invite :)

Frederic Parker

Date: 8/23/2019 10:10:00 PM

We both posted similarly themed poems today...Goodluck dear poet in the contest

Heidi Sands
Date: 8/24/2019 4:31:00 AM

Wow that is amazing. I just saw it and will be returning to comment. Thank you :)

Vijay Pandit

Date: 8/23/2019 5:15:00 PM

I like the imagery that slowly unfolds the story..and loved the ending..excellent write, Heidi.

Heidi Sands
Date: 8/23/2019 5:26:00 PM

Thank you very much Vijay ! Have a nice evening :)