Heidi Sands Poet Free verse

On Crimson Hill

He sat on top of the crimson hill
Looking, staring,
Asking why?
Tears fell on blades of grass
Like, drops from a bleeding heart
He tugged at his torn jeans
Reached deep in his pocket
Looked at the photo
Asking why?
Heartbroken, blurred vision,
He stood, then stumbled 
On what felt like shaky ground
Wind snapped branches
A storm was brewing
He stayed there anyway
Now, drenched in rain
Feeling tattered and torn,
He looked down
Said, “I love you, forever”
To the grave in the ground
When the dark clouds parted,
He stood in the light…
Suddenly, felt a warm embrace
A miraculous smile emerged
He swore he saw her beside him that night!

8/23/19   

Entry for the Wow Me Poetry Contest.  Sponsor:   Nina Parmenter

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Paul Callus August 31, 2019 at 3:49 PM Yours is a striking, descriptive poem, both in imagery and emotion, Heidi. Such a tender and touching ending! ~ Regards // paul Heidi Sands August 31, 2019 at 5:25 PM Thank you very much Paul. I appreciate your comment :)

M. L. Kiser August 27, 2019 at 3:50 PM It's a winner, I think, beautiful imagery and flow to this poem. Good luck in the contest. Heidi Sands August 27, 2019 at 7:29 PM Thank you M.L. , I believe it didn't place ..but I appreciate your kind comment :)

Carolyn Devonshire August 26, 2019 at 2:03 PM A stunning ending, rich in the "wow" factor Nina wants. Maybe he did see her beside him that night. I woke from sleep to see my mother one night, my late husband another. If I were judging this contest, your entry would rank high. Best wishes in Nina's contest. Hugs, Carolyn PS- Have you been in touch with Sandra Haight? Heidi Sands August 26, 2019 at 2:49 PM Oh, thank you very much Carolyn. I appreciate your support! That is kind of you to say and interesting about you waking up from sleep that way. No, I haven't been in touch with Sandra Haight?

Anne-Lise Andresen August 26, 2019 at 1:54 PM - I believe that we can recognize and have contact with family or friends after death, Heidi - A lovely poem :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Heidi Sands August 26, 2019 at 2:49 PM Thank you for your kind visit Anne-Lise :)

Swetha Vangaveti August 26, 2019 at 6:12 AM Devastating and then revitalising at the end!! Liked it Heidi. A great write that stirred emotions. :) Heidi Sands August 26, 2019 at 7:07 AM Thank you Swetha. I appreciate your comment on this :)

Ann Gilmour August 26, 2019 at 4:56 AM Your beautiful words and emotional ending certainly Wowed me Heidi. Such a moving poem, which in a way I could relate to and I am so glad he saw her that night. Good luck Heidi. With kindest thoughts Ann xx Heidi Sands August 26, 2019 at 7:07 AM Thank you Ann. I appreciate your visit and comment. I hope all is well :)

Nette Onclaud August 26, 2019 at 4:00 AM with that element of surprise in the end, you blew me away, heidi...impressive; i see a win for you.. huggs Heidi Sands August 26, 2019 at 7:06 AM Thank you very much Nette :)

Susan Ashley August 24, 2019 at 10:34 PM A sadly beautiful poem so tenderly expressed, Heidi. Wonderfully done! Best wishes for a win and warmest wishes for you.. ~Susan Heidi Sands August 25, 2019 at 4:39 AM Oh, thank you so much Susan. I appreciate your kindness :)

Connie Marcum Wong August 24, 2019 at 7:45 PM A sad but beautiful poem Heidi. She was definitely with him in spirit. I hope this rates high on the winner's list. xxoo Heidi Sands August 25, 2019 at 4:38 AM Yes, she was. Thank you Connie :)

Panagiota Romios August 24, 2019 at 11:08 AM Heidi, how moving and well written. Panagiota Heidi Sands August 24, 2019 at 11:11 AM Thank you for your kind comment Panagiota :)

Silent One August 24, 2019 at 6:46 AM this is a sad poem, we always yearn for those we lose... Heidi Sands August 24, 2019 at 6:47 AM Yes. Thank you for your visit and comment SO :)

S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri August 24, 2019 at 6:18 AM Aw wow so touching and awesomely creative! You express on his behalf in a very poetic soulful way with wonderful imagery enhancing the muse and feel. Kudos for this one of your masterpieces I think. You ought to be proud of this! Pls pleez do review/ comment my newest poem too. Heidi Sands August 24, 2019 at 6:24 AM Thank you for your kind feedback and invite :)

Frederic Parker August 23, 2019 at 10:10 PM We both posted similarly themed poems today...Goodluck dear poet in the contest Heidi Sands August 24, 2019 at 4:31 AM Wow that is amazing. I just saw it and will be returning to comment. Thank you :)

Vijay Pandit August 23, 2019 at 5:15 PM I like the imagery that slowly unfolds the story..and loved the ending..excellent write, Heidi. Heidi Sands August 23, 2019 at 5:26 PM Thank you very much Vijay ! Have a nice evening :)