On a Painting 1

On a  Painting

Hey, what are you up to?
here is a sliver of earth
between two gravid rivers  ?

Swelling  with milk
they quelled  dyslexic lands 
that dried and cried in nobody’s tongue.
they too had a fateful beat.  
only it was random or circardian. 

Obscurity is clarity, here and now,
of  mitochondrial stuff.
methodical  minimalisation
inside  a faceless river of black milk.
languorous flow to  wet  phenomenal  banks.

Who  would not notice
the hyperlinks  dripping nectar?
like  running nose, perhaps,
in a manner of speaking.
they flow into a fulfillment,
Or into wind-swept  islets!

Inspiration: The Frida Kahlo Painting “ My nurse and I”

By S.Jagathsimhan Nair, 12 Aug 13

For Cyndi's contest.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2013

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Harper Avatar
November 7, 2013 at 10:53 PM
Congratulations on your win S. Jagathsimhan, this is a vision in words
Lamoureux Avatar
November 7, 2013 at 8:00 PM
I am honored to share second place with you. Well done my friend!
A  Avatar
November 7, 2013 at 12:22 PM
Jag, brilliant imagery... nice win * HUGS & LOVE <3 ~SKAT~ :)
Phillips Avatar
October 15, 2013 at 11:33 PM
I like this entire stanza" Obscurity is clarity, here and now,of mitochondrial stuff.methodical minimalisation inside a faceless river of black milk.languorous flow to wet phenomenal banks"
Onclaud Avatar
September 7, 2013 at 10:45 AM
creatively handled, bl... i like the way you interpreted this art-piece... :) huggs
Dietrich Avatar
September 7, 2013 at 10:43 AM
very unusual and vivid imagery to portray what you saw in the painting. I LIKES!!
Carrillo Avatar
September 5, 2013 at 8:12 PM
You painted a beautiful painting with this poem. Good luck in the contest..... Lucilla
Cee Avatar
September 1, 2013 at 2:44 AM
hey! this is wonderful!
Kendrick Avatar
August 16, 2013 at 11:46 AM
Very expressive and descriptive work that you have penned..I am glad that I chose this one to read today..Will look up the painting..Sara
Kendrick Avatar
August 16, 2013 at 11:55 AM
I tried to find some of her work on the internet but it was not easy to find..I did find some that said it was her work..She was a great artist..Sara
Onclaud Avatar
August 13, 2013 at 11:08 AM
bold and uniquely scribed, jag.. you took a chance at twisting the theme and certainly deliver a new facet of this gem.. :) huggs
Andresen Avatar
August 13, 2013 at 2:48 AM
- A skillful poem, Jag! - A winning poem, I think. - Good luck! - All the best to you. - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)
A   Avatar
August 12, 2013 at 9:32 PM
amazing... Jag, good luck in the contest... Linda
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