On a Painting 1

On a  Painting

Hey, what are you up to?
here is a sliver of earth
between two gravid rivers  ?

Swelling  with milk
they quelled  dyslexic lands 
that dried and cried in nobody’s tongue.
they too had a fateful beat.  
only it was random or circardian. 

Obscurity is clarity, here and now,
of  mitochondrial stuff.
methodical  minimalisation
inside  a faceless river of black milk.
languorous flow to  wet  phenomenal  banks.

Who  would not notice
the hyperlinks  dripping nectar?
like  running nose, perhaps,
in a manner of speaking.
they flow into a fulfillment,
Or into wind-swept  islets!

Inspiration: The Frida Kahlo Painting “ My nurse and I”

By S.Jagathsimhan Nair, 12 Aug 13

For Cyndi's contest.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013



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Date: 11/7/2013 10:53:00 PM
Congratulations on your win S. Jagathsimhan, this is a vision in words
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Date: 11/7/2013 8:00:00 PM
I am honored to share second place with you. Well done my friend!
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Date: 11/7/2013 12:22:00 PM
Jag, brilliant imagery... nice win * HUGS & LOVE <3 ~SKAT~ :)
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Date: 10/15/2013 11:33:00 PM
I like this entire stanza" Obscurity is clarity, here and now,of mitochondrial stuff.methodical minimalisation inside a faceless river of black milk.languorous flow to wet phenomenal banks"
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Date: 9/7/2013 10:45:00 AM
creatively handled, bl... i like the way you interpreted this art-piece... :) huggs
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Date: 9/7/2013 10:43:00 AM
very unusual and vivid imagery to portray what you saw in the painting. I LIKES!!
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Date: 9/5/2013 8:12:00 PM
You painted a beautiful painting with this poem. Good luck in the contest..... Lucilla
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Date: 9/1/2013 2:44:00 AM
hey! this is wonderful!
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Date: 8/16/2013 11:46:00 AM
Very expressive and descriptive work that you have penned..I am glad that I chose this one to read today..Will look up the painting..Sara
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Date: 8/16/2013 11:55:00 AM
I tried to find some of her work on the internet but it was not easy to find..I did find some that said it was her work..She was a great artist..Sara
Date: 8/13/2013 11:08:00 AM
bold and uniquely scribed, jag.. you took a chance at twisting the theme and certainly deliver a new facet of this gem.. :) huggs
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Date: 8/13/2013 2:48:00 AM
- A skillful poem, Jag! - A winning poem, I think. - Good luck! - All the best to you. - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 8/12/2013 9:32:00 PM
amazing... Jag, good luck in the contest... Linda
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