Benjamin Bartley Poet Free verse

Olive

                         Swirling my slurred thots 
                                          around and ‘round and ‘round 
                           with my miniature blue plastic sword 
                                         I’ve pierced my brain 
                             All green and stuffed with blue cheese 
                                              Oh, I’ll live 
                                                 Oh, live 
                                                      Olive

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Gregory Golden December 28, 2024 at 9:25 PM The "Olive" poem swirls around in my head like a carousel. Yeah, baby, naughty, naughty, because I like it a lot! Can I please have some more anchovies with the olives on top? Indeed, the wordplay is superb.

Susan Ashley December 28, 2024 at 10:49 AM Dear Benjamin, your poem is ingenious! Love the swirl of your "slurred thots", "around and ‘round and ‘round" down to the last three lines.. clever captivation! Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Paige Hind December 16, 2024 at 1:46 PM Interesting - this is a cool write

Matthew Herfurth December 8, 2024 at 7:25 PM Great use of words that create great imagery.

Andrea Dietrich December 5, 2024 at 12:15 PM very creative! I hate AI.

Sotto Poet December 5, 2024 at 8:20 AM The amazing poem tackles the chaotic and surreal nature of thinking and awareness, mixing aspects of joy and absurdity, as expressed in the imagery of a "miniature blue plastic sword" and "blue cheese."You are really brilliant and capable of writing on any topic. Thank you for commenting on my page.