Old Man With a Heavy Load

An old man plods slowly down the rutted middle
Of an ancient dusty country lane, unmindful of his steps.
His calloused sandaled feet know the way,
As he has trodden this path to market for decades,
Or centuries perhaps,
He no longer tries, or cares, to remember.
Time has lost all meaning.
Bowed beneath the heavy weight of years and toil,
He wears the mantle of his life,
Not proudly as he once did in his hopeful youth,
But now the way he bears his cumbersome burden
Of broken limbs and sticks and twigs,
With a resigned and weary sadness as immutable and maimed
As the arthritic stumps and knees of old cypress trees,
Or countless other old withered and withering men
Like him.


Author's note: This piece, dear readers, was inspired by "Man with a Sack of Wood", a sketch by Vincent van Gogh.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2023



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Date: 9/12/2023 11:09:00 PM
Well a heavy message from you jim LOL))) I am not finding it too cumbersome In carrying this comment to your page??? Screen.? Whatever.? Its a (sticking point) Descriptions these days..I'm getting older By the minute you remind me; Here Jim I (would put more) but i'm helping with a Person who is just branching out in this Literary jungle..' i'll leaf out the details for Now.' Hello Jim J was reading one of Tom Woods writes earlier on and obviously got You confused.' I have commented on your Writes before i am sure.' I find you to be a Competent writer btw as i find others here Even though some may not like me, I won't Demean a persons literary abilitys.' Because Of that.'
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Jim Slaughter
Date: 9/13/2023 11:47:00 AM
Joe, I really appreciate your comments...but are you sure you meant them for me?
Date: 8/27/2023 11:58:00 AM
Such a beautiful poem. As I grow older, I find the things I took for granted when younger are now nearly impossible to do.
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Date: 8/27/2023 12:23:00 PM
That's probably something we all have in common, Jerry. Thanks for stopping by.
Date: 8/26/2023 4:31:00 PM
Wow….a beautiful write Jim! Debx
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Date: 8/27/2023 12:23:00 PM
Thank you, Deb.
Date: 8/25/2023 8:19:00 PM
Some people just look at paintings as just paintings. But you gave it a life story. Well done, Jim :)
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Jim Slaughter
Date: 8/26/2023 10:35:00 AM
Akkina, thank you. As I recall, I wrote this piece some time ago. Perhaps I was struggling with a "load" of some sort that day.
Date: 8/25/2023 2:46:00 PM
an excellent poem, jim! coincidentally, i spent part of the afternoon looking at cypress paintings and sketches by van gogh and wrote about that, too...
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Date: 8/26/2023 10:34:00 AM
Thank you, Ilene. Actually, my favorites of his are "Starry Night" and "Sunflowers", but neither of them has ever inspired me to write anything. Go figure...
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