Old Girl Down

Old Girl Down

One step after another took the old girl down
Rain, asphalt black answered back
Cold shoes, wet feet, puddled deep
Overhead dark clouds settle in 
The forecast called for more of the same
Women and fossils should not be out in this
Sounds splash hard off echoed solid streets
Gray tall buildings went by one after another
When will it end when there is no end in sight
One step after another took the old girl down
Copyright © | Year Posted 2015

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Nance Avatar
May 30, 2015 at 7:42 AM
Impressively descriptive, your line "women and fossils should should not be out in this" Your way with words is so unique, cheer up your glum and smile for me :)
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May 30, 2015 at 8:50 AM
Hi Casarah, It is nice to hear from you. "Don't Worry."... "Be Happy." Thank you for your kind words. I am a very happy go lucky guy. I am the original, definitive class clown. Nothing bothers me. I was in a very good mood here in sunny Florida when I created this in the early morning hours today. Have a wonderful weekend. Earl
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May 30, 2015 at 6:52 AM
Earl, the picture you paint is seen too often on the streets of our cities where hope slowly erodes to hopelessness. This is a beautifully written and stunningly sad poem.
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May 30, 2015 at 7:30 AM
Hi John, Thank you for your interesting and supportive comments. I guess you can see why the old girl is down. It is bright and sunny here in Florida today. I'm actually in a good mood. Some where some place some one is not. I guess this is simply a reflective piece. I hope the old gal finds her way home and finds some dry shoes. Have a great week end. Earl
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