old bridge hiku

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For Brian Strand's Your Choice R Poetry Contest

1 June 2025

wooden b e stood still * _________ r i d g _____* ** _______________________** | / /|\ \ | moss on ebony timbers~ unwritten poems dwell

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/2/2025 11:43:00 PM

A winner. Congrats

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/2/2025 11:40:00 PM

So inventive!

Bernard F. Asuncion

Date: 6/1/2025 6:59:00 PM

This is a very cool and creative visual poem! It cleverly uses spacing and an ASCII-art-like structure to create an image of a bridge, while the words themselves build on that imagery. The overall feeling is one of stillness, age, contemplation, and perhaps a touch of mystery or wistfulness. It's a very unique and successful piece of micro-poetry combined with visual art. Congrats, Sister JCB. - BFA

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 6/1/2025 11:09:00 AM

What a fun/creative "old bridge hiku" write. "Good Luck" if for a contest. Have a blessed day writing away...............

Susan Ashley

Date: 6/1/2025 10:04:00 AM

Dear Jcb, I adore wooden bridges and the nostalgic beauty and tone of your hiku. I love to imagine the stories old bridges (and houses too), could tell if only they could. Fantastic, my poet friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Di11y Da11y

Date: 6/1/2025 6:24:00 AM

Another cute one! :)

Tom Woody

Date: 6/1/2025 5:49:00 AM

What stories could it tell? Nice

JCB Brul
Date: 6/1/2025 5:56:00 AM

Thank you Tom. Mostly childhood. ^___^