Oh My Sun

Tender streams the night flames a flicker filled delight fresh a yellow painted rose held in perfect sweet repose Oh my sun, my precious sun your warmth breathes long hidden 'mongst a subtle guise filling out a summer's day Lunar leaps an oval face stealing rays of saving grace languid pains a vision lost heart lie still a tempest tossed

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Anna Hopper

Date: 8/31/2017 7:59:00 AM

Every poem, of yours, I read... breathtaking! You are an inspiration! You choose the most beautiful words and they flow, wonderfully!

Akkina Downing

Date: 8/23/2017 1:02:00 PM

Stealing rays of saving grace... I love this very much! :)

Seren Roberts

Date: 8/22/2017 8:06:00 PM

Now I enjoyed this poem Tim......Seren

Dean Wood

Date: 8/22/2017 12:14:00 PM

The eclipse was cool here. Not quite full but close. Real eerie! Great write Tim!

Scott Thirtyseven

Date: 8/22/2017 9:27:00 AM

Three stand-alone verses, expertly molded into each one another. What a great day.

Robert Lindley

Date: 8/22/2017 6:12:00 AM

WAS RAINY HERE YESTERDAY BUT SUN PROMISED TODAY TO BRING ITS SHINE! Love this well composed and uplifting verse today my friend.. A fav...

Russell Sivey

Date: 8/22/2017 5:43:00 AM

This is a fabulous and inspirational write my friend! I truly loved reading your delightful poem this morning! You have impressed upon me a masterful piece, such a creative and delightful poem, Great Work Tim!!

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 8/22/2017 4:41:00 AM

- Gorgeous poem, Tim - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Arthur Vaso

Date: 8/22/2017 2:24:00 AM

Very creative for today!!!

Vijay Pandit

Date: 8/21/2017 5:59:00 PM

Very smooth rhythm--a timely topic--well done, Tim!

Kevin Shaw

Date: 8/21/2017 5:51:00 PM

Super poem about one of the most spectacular events anyone couls ever witness. Regards, Kevin

Charlie Smith

Date: 8/21/2017 3:29:00 PM

A lovely topical rhyme Mr. Smith, well done...

Jan Allison

Date: 8/21/2017 2:53:00 PM

beautiful and uplifting Tim:-) it's been dull and wet here and we didn't see the sun today so the bit of the eclipse that would have been visible on our Island didn't materialise at all lol:-( hugs jan xx

Heidi Sands

Date: 8/21/2017 2:10:00 PM

You are such a good writer Tim. I love this. I enjoyed this today :)