OFF THE BALCONY - Anacreontic Couplets

Roses spread with lace garter;
Boutonnière and charter.
Green meadow eyes clung to lass.
Juliet was upper class.
A shepherd was he, with crook.
All gentle men, she forsook.
Under the willow, the wind
Warmed petals with no rescind.
Tempo was slow with his bride
Deep smile, a groom could not hide.
Underneath his ruddy beard,
“Reverie,” the garden cheered.
How lucky was a poor man
To find a robust woman.
Off the balcony she came.
Her shepherd, never the same.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2023

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Ashley Avatar
January 5, 2024 at 6:47 PM
Dear Kim, your couplets are "quiet a rollick" too! Love the creative, clever and sensual wordplay and imagery. Congratulations for your wonderful win in Silent One's contest. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Pandit Avatar
January 4, 2024 at 5:48 AM
BIG congrats on your top win, my friend--splendidly crafted couplets, Kim.
Rodrigues Avatar
January 4, 2024 at 6:25 AM
Thank you, Vijay!
Kerr Avatar
January 3, 2024 at 9:10 PM
Kim, the heartiest congratulations on your placement with this peerless piece. Subtle, poignant, romantic. Thanks for your encouraging words on Rapid Urban Belt. They are much appreciated I wish you a Happy New Year and successful writing Howard
Rodrigues Avatar
January 4, 2024 at 6:25 AM
Thank you, Howard!
Dietrich Avatar
January 3, 2024 at 10:12 AM
A romantic one. This form works so well with such a theme. Congrats
Rodrigues Avatar
January 3, 2024 at 2:18 PM
Thank you, Andrea! <3
One Avatar
January 1, 2024 at 10:49 AM
Oh this is a sad one Kim.. Nicely done.. Congratulations on your placement in the contest..
Rodrigues Avatar
January 1, 2024 at 2:36 PM
Let me clarify, she didn’t fall off the balcony. Keep in mind the wording is sensuous :) Thank you for my placement,!
Kelii Kekaula Avatar
December 31, 2023 at 9:19 AM
Lol, I wrote a piece about a 'crook' too. Am I the only one who wrote a single six-liner, ugh. Love your writing of it, sway teetering never toppling--beautiful, Kim. Cheers to your 2024. Aloha, William
Rodrigues Avatar
December 31, 2023 at 12:10 PM
Thank you so much! Aloha and Happy New Year 2024!
Poet Avatar
December 31, 2023 at 6:20 AM
An exquisite creation, Kim. I enjoyed the conclusion that "her shepherd was never the same." Cheers to an incredible New Year!
Rodrigues Avatar
December 31, 2023 at 12:11 PM
Thank you, Lasaad! A man who finds love never is and likewise one who loses his lifetime love. Happy New Year!
Sharma  Avatar
December 30, 2023 at 9:10 PM
Wow, this is such a magical poem dear Kim, full of fantasy aura and delightful 'Reverie'.. Your poetic skills are shimmering with poetic elegance as your rhymes are so beautiful along with the wordplay here.. Absolutely stunning! Sending you best wishes for the New Year, love & light :)
Rodrigues Avatar
December 31, 2023 at 6:15 AM
Thank you for your sweet comment, very appreciated! Happy New Year 2024, dear one!
Kavanagh  Avatar
December 30, 2023 at 4:31 PM
Nicely written Kim, with great language choice, much better than saying “Juliet liked a bit of rough the shepherd was very hot stuff” sorry I haven’t been around in a while, hope you’re doing well, cheers David
Rodrigues Avatar
December 30, 2023 at 6:57 PM
Thanks, David! LOL. Happy New Year!
Sands Avatar
December 30, 2023 at 2:05 PM
Excellent poem to be led to today. :)
Rodrigues Avatar
December 30, 2023 at 2:34 PM
Thank you so much!
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