Eileen Manassian Poet Narrative

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Of Stargazers and Starshooters

The stargazers got together
and spread a blanket out on the grass
of the lush and opulent lawn
Here, they all huddled together
astronomy addicted
they gazed as comets blazed
sad to see them fall
shooting stars
caught their eyes
but on the stars in the skies
constellation sewn 
clustered or alone
The stars shone...
On these, they fixed their eyes
as they "oohed" and "ahhhed"
Celestially seduced- draw
It didn't matter
that some stars shone brighter
they all felt lighter
just being under star dusted canopy of night
This was their delight!


The starshooters were there
on an adjacent hill
they lost out on the thrill
grumbled and brewed
fumed and spewed
profanity at the lights
hanging high in the night
heaven's chandeliers
too bright they seemed
too dazzling and near
they were filled with fear
that the heavens would explode
so many stars...a heavy load
and so the star shooters
gathered their troopers
and aimed at the stars
Hoping to make them combust and fall
This would fill they with mirth
As stars collided with earth
Little did they know
stars couldn't be shot
Not by any old lot
They were meant to shine down
beauty and light
embellishing the night
with their wondrous light
a celestial delight!

The stargazers...now they
Well, what can I say?
They watched starworks at play
till night turned to day
and they then went on their way
Filled with delight,
What a sight!

Stargazer or starshooter
Tell me...
Which had it right?

Eileen Manassian

The term Starshooter is not my own. A super souper shared it with me the other day....I quite like it. Thanks!

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Paul Callus March 2, 2016 at 9:18 AM Keep on star gazing, Eileen...that is how beautiful and romantic poetry is born! I admit to being a star gazer and have no qualms about it:) As for star shooters....they do exist, even among poets!! Hugs // paul

Timothy Hicks February 29, 2016 at 1:37 AM One can fantasize about the flavor of the tea, Eileen ... while others (like yourself) have known through experience ... that it's piping hot and often gets cold when left alone ... ;)

White Sage February 28, 2016 at 3:15 AM the stargazers are better, but i guess the starshooters will probably make a wonderful sight for the gazers, excellent write Eileen, this is superb Eileen Manassian February 28, 2016 at 9:49 AM I'm grateful for your many visits today, WS. You are very kind to visit my poems. I hope you have posted something new. I will be by to see you soon. hugs

Timothy Hicks February 27, 2016 at 9:36 PM I would say the stargazers ... definitely. The star-shooters are just jealous ;) Imaginative writes are amidst my favorites, Eileen, and you penned a great one, that oozed with cheery wisdom. A fave for me. Eileen Manassian February 28, 2016 at 9:50 AM That's what I was told by the person who shared this word with me. She said I'm a star. Now...how sweet is that. Thanks for the visit, Timothy. I appreciate the fact that you visit me though my writing is not....your cup of tea! ;) Hugs

Chad Obrien February 27, 2016 at 4:51 PM Brilliant, keep shootin' for the stars. Eileen Manassian February 28, 2016 at 9:50 AM I will try. Thank you. :)

Andrea Dietrich February 27, 2016 at 4:17 PM OH MY, I LOVE where you took my name for those meanies!! You clever clever girl. Thanks for letting me know you did this one. VERY cool!!! Andrea Dietrich February 28, 2016 at 7:56 PM Of course I want you to give out the secret. It was never a secret!! Eileen Manassian February 28, 2016 at 9:51 AM Wasn't sure if you wanted me to give out the secret. Thanks, Andrea. You sure lifted my spirit, dear. Hugs...

Nette Onclaud February 27, 2016 at 1:18 PM you are a star in your own right, dear eileen... i am a gazer and this is just captivating with bright images...huggs Eileen Manassian February 27, 2016 at 1:40 PM You are kind to me, dear Nette. Thanks ever so much! :) I wish I could use imagery the way you do...You are so gifted, dear. I appreciate the visit. Hugs! :)

CayCay Godwin February 27, 2016 at 12:44 PM I never heard the word "star shooter', but think you did great explaining what it surely means, no matter though, because I want to sit with the gazers. How lovely their night, I thank you for taking me there - what a joy, oh, how I want to go .... CayCay Eileen Manassian February 27, 2016 at 1:42 PM Andrea shared that term with me. I liked it, and decided to expound on it. I do love astronomy, though. I once had a dream where all the constellations paraded in front of me...I'll never forget it. My dad is into astronomy and would always point out the constellations. We are all stars in the sky...and we are to bask in the light of one another....Thanks for the read...and for helping me see my mistake. Please...feel free to offer your help to me at any time. I welcome it. Hugs

Alexis Y. February 27, 2016 at 11:07 AM Elieen, you have penned a well written piece. With superb imagery. And I must say what I saw was such a beautiful sight. Excellent job!:-) Alexis 7 Eileen Manassian February 27, 2016 at 1:43 PM :) You are very sweet, dear. I'm glad you enjoyed this little piece. I didn't do too much of editing on it. Just some thoughts I wanted to get down before they flitted away. Hugs to you.

Richard Lamoureux February 27, 2016 at 9:15 AM This is so amazing. You are a bright light in our poetic sky! Eileen Manassian February 27, 2016 at 1:45 PM You are very kind to me, Richard. I appreciate it so very much....Your light shines brightly as well. 11th most popular poet. I'm so proud of you. Your poem rose to first rank. :) That's what I call talent!!! Let some of your stardust settle on me.