Jeanne Mcgee Poet Free verse

Of Retirement

Retirement is 
Like a wind-up toy
going strong
until you unwind
and fall asleep
in mid stride


One Sentence Metaphor in Free Verse Poetry Contest
Jesse Rowe Sponsor

Written 7-28-2019

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L. J. Carber September 16, 2020 at 2:56 PM So true-- I like to fall asleep every afternoon, just like my grandparents did when I was a kid [but did not understand then!]

Caren Krutsinger July 30, 2019 at 5:51 AM Let's keep writing poetry about getting older, for it is so much fun! HA! Great job, for the win! Jeanne Mcgee July 30, 2019 at 9:35 AM xoxo

Sandra Adams July 29, 2019 at 10:14 PM Lol good one Kim! Some people can do that long before retirement :) hugs

Ronald D Thompson July 29, 2019 at 4:49 PM Blimey that's me now and I haven't yet retired!! A perfect analogy! Excellent. RT Jeanne Mcgee July 29, 2019 at 6:28 PM Oh, Oh,...you'll be sleeping while you write!

Gershon Wolf July 29, 2019 at 2:06 PM Ha, ha! This is perfect. What an apt description. Hope you land on top of the heap in the contest! You certainly deserve to with this great write! :) gw Jeanne Mcgee July 29, 2019 at 4:42 PM Yay...thank you...oops I just fell asleep in mid sentence! lol

Line Gauthier July 29, 2019 at 5:02 AM Bravo, Jeanne. We don't quite have the same get up and go. Jeanne Mcgee July 29, 2019 at 9:27 AM I noticed my last two poems were about getting older...lol. I've really been feeling it this week as I try to do some maintenance around my place.

Tom Cunningham July 29, 2019 at 1:53 AM Love it and so true Jeanne, good luck. Tom Jeanne Mcgee July 29, 2019 at 9:27 AM Thanks Tom!