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Of Retirement

Retirement is Like a wind-up toy going strong until you unwind and fall asleep in mid stride One Sentence Metaphor in Free Verse Poetry Contest Jesse Rowe Sponsor Written 7-28-2019

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L. J. Carber

Date: 9/16/2020 2:56:00 PM

So true-- I like to fall asleep every afternoon, just like my grandparents did when I was a kid [but did not understand then!]

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 7/30/2019 5:51:00 AM

Let's keep writing poetry about getting older, for it is so much fun! HA! Great job, for the win!

Jeanne Mcgee
Date: 7/30/2019 9:35:00 AM

xoxo

Sandra Adams

Date: 7/29/2019 10:14:00 PM

Lol good one Kim! Some people can do that long before retirement :) hugs

Ronald D Thompson

Date: 7/29/2019 4:49:00 PM

Blimey that's me now and I haven't yet retired!! A perfect analogy! Excellent. RT

Jeanne Mcgee
Date: 7/29/2019 6:28:00 PM

Oh, Oh,...you'll be sleeping while you write!

Gershon Wolf

Date: 7/29/2019 2:06:00 PM

Ha, ha! This is perfect. What an apt description. Hope you land on top of the heap in the contest! You certainly deserve to with this great write! :) gw

Jeanne Mcgee
Date: 7/29/2019 4:42:00 PM

Yay...thank you...oops I just fell asleep in mid sentence! lol

Line Gauthier

Date: 7/29/2019 5:02:00 AM

Bravo, Jeanne. We don't quite have the same get up and go.

Jeanne Mcgee
Date: 7/29/2019 9:27:00 AM

I noticed my last two poems were about getting older...lol. I've really been feeling it this week as I try to do some maintenance around my place.

Tom Cunningham

Date: 7/29/2019 1:53:00 AM

Love it and so true Jeanne, good luck. Tom

Jeanne Mcgee
Date: 7/29/2019 9:27:00 AM

Thanks Tom!