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Ocean's Apart

A letter came from Jim I’d better go to him I’ll buy a rowing boat, then try to stay afloat! Must cross the ocean quick- Oh toss! I get sea sick I miss my dear sweetheart No kiss since we're apart Verses In Essence - 8 Lines Poetry Contest Sponsored by Joseph May 06/30/20

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Aditi Mishra

Date: 7/16/2020 1:37:00 PM

This is sweet and sad at the same time Jan. A touching tale of love being missed. Congratulations on your win. Blessings and love :)

John Watt

Date: 7/12/2020 7:57:00 PM

Thought I had commented before, but can't find it here... oh toss! Love this well crafted write of missing your love. Well done, and congratulations on your win, my friend. Blessings ~ John

Hilo Poet

Date: 7/12/2020 3:55:00 AM

Rare smile dons on my face, Jan, a delightful gem and my compliments on your win, my friend -- Aloha from Hawaii~@William

Joseph May

Date: 7/11/2020 3:12:00 PM

I love the third stanza of this wonderful write Jan, Congrats on your win..

Janice Canerdy

Date: 7/11/2020 1:46:00 PM

A great poem, Jan--a WINNER! Janice

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders

Date: 7/2/2020 4:49:00 PM

This a sweet write in a difficult form, Jan, and it looks like you were inspired by a great song. Richard Marx was very popular when I was in high school...I've been trying to come up with something for this contest all day. If the lines were 8 syllables instead of 6, it would be easier to get that internal rhyme. Maybe if I listen to Richard a little more, I'll be inspired. lol :) Rhonda

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 7/2/2020 3:17:00 AM

I love this Jan. I can sing this and I cannot sing.

Gershon Wolf

Date: 7/1/2020 3:56:00 PM

I misconnected the dots a bit, and had you seasick -- wishing you could plant a kiss on Jim! No wonder you're staying home! lol. Thanks, Jan. :) gw

Jan Allison
Date: 7/1/2020 5:48:00 PM

lol GW it is pretty much a nonsense poem :-) hugs Jan xx

Rico Leffanta

Date: 7/1/2020 1:58:00 PM

That is what happens when one rows across the Irish Sea! Aloha! Rico

Jan Allison
Date: 7/1/2020 5:40:00 PM

lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Tom Cunningham

Date: 7/1/2020 2:46:00 AM

You've made this look easy Jan, I'm struggling with this one, end rhyme is not the problem it's the other lol. Tom

Jan Allison
Date: 7/1/2020 5:39:00 PM

It is a challenge Tom but I've just commented on yours and you've done well:-) hugs Jan xx

Michael Tor

Date: 6/30/2020 11:46:00 PM

Touching piece Jan... Hugs

Jan Allison
Date: 7/1/2020 5:34:00 PM

Thanks Michael:-) hugs Jan xx

Mark Koplin

Date: 6/30/2020 8:34:00 PM

Good write Jan!

Jan Allison
Date: 7/1/2020 5:33:00 PM

Thanks Mark:-) hugs Jan xx

Eric Boddie

Date: 6/30/2020 6:10:00 PM

what if i meet you half way....i will be there with no delay....i will row you to the shore....then your mind, i will explore....of course we will eat some food....i might smoke, i am that dude....but not rude, theres always respect....you are a friend i wont neglect....and then you are from the isle of man....lol

Jan Allison
Date: 6/30/2020 6:14:00 PM

lol your rhyming comment made me smile:-) hugs jan xx