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Ocean And River Merge - Haiku

Ocean And River Merge - Haiku

two bodies soft, wet
exchange their fluids in storms
ocean, river, merge
 

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014




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Date: 11/3/2014 11:52:00 PM
Great one! I also a Haiku lover.
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Earl Schumacker
Date: 11/4/2014 4:13:00 AM
Good morning Marvin, Thank you so much for your kind words. Yes. The Haiku is fun to write and fun to read. They are little compact pieces of life. Have a great day. Earl
Date: 11/3/2014 9:33:00 PM
Yes, I see it -- fresh water mixing with the salt water, merging into one -- the rising and falling of the tides. I like it. One crazy thought -- exchange 2nd line with 3rd line . . . keeps the reader in suspense! Also, don't use capitals . . . I didn't know this until someone told me -- it's a haiku rule. All the best my friend -- great poem
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Earl Schumacker
Date: 11/4/2014 4:19:00 AM
Hi David, Thank you so much for your astute observations. I agree with you about the switching of lines to create more drama and impact. Not using capitals is a capital idea. I might employ that rule from time to time for a change. I would not worry about rules too much though. They are not always useful or fun. I hope the Haiku police don't hit me with a citation. I hope you have a great day. Earl