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Image result for pictures of an older woman in obvious pain walking with a cane

Observe

Observe, deep laugh lines run
Obligingly around
Obedient to years
Of smiles upon her face.
Overlook her awful
Obviously painful 
Ongoing constant throe 

Date: 04/04/2021
Contest: Pleiades O
Sponsor: Kim Merryman

agecharacterpainfree verse

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Janice Canerdy

April 10, 2021 at 10:52 AM

Very moving and well done, Sara. CONGRATS on your win. Janice

Sara Kendrick

April 10, 2021 at 1:18 PM

Janice, Thanks for the nice comment. I appreciate you dropping by with congrats. Sara

Howard Kerr

April 10, 2021 at 3:55 AM

Sara, this work is beyond special in my eyes. Well done. Thanks for complimenting my entry. Howard

Sara Kendrick

April 10, 2021 at 4:30 AM

Howard, Thanks for dropping by and giving my work such a kind review. Sara

Unseeking Seeker

April 9, 2021 at 7:25 PM

Wow Sara! A beautiful Pleiades, with never say die, mood elevating message! Congrats on your win! Contests are difficult to judge, reflecting what resonates with the sponsor; I readily admit to this flaw myself! Have a great day!

Sara Kendrick

April 10, 2021 at 4:24 AM

US, Yes, the contest winner/winners depends on what the sponsor thinks and no one else. I have to decide what to do on each one I do. I usually only eliminate the ones which do not follow the rules that I asked then decide what to do with what is left. I know every poem has its good points and deserves notice. Thanks for dropping by my page. Sara

Andrea Dietrich

April 7, 2021 at 3:08 PM

Nicely done, Sara. In her blog I think she tells how she left out the complete rules for this form. Otherwise, I bet this would have scored higher!

Sara Kendrick

April 7, 2021 at 4:14 PM

Andrea, Well, it is seven line and 6 syllables plus it is all about observe so I guess it follows the rules. It is not about a name of a person either. I guess it was her choice to place it lower. Sometimes the judge likes what is said or not. It is always up to them. I try not to let it bother me anymore. I just write something and try to do it correctly then let it go. Thanks for dropping by. Sara

Kim Merryman

April 7, 2021 at 2:10 PM

Sara, congrats on your win in my contest with your observant pleaides! Blessings, Kim M

Sara Kendrick

April 7, 2021 at 4:11 PM

Kim, Thanks for dropping by to let me know that I placed in your contest. Sara

Eve Roper

April 6, 2021 at 10:29 PM

Great write, Sara, congratulations on your Pleiades win. The picture and verse is how I feel. Eve

Sara Kendrick

April 7, 2021 at 4:03 PM

Eve, Thanks for dropping by with your kind review. Sara

Judy Ball

April 5, 2021 at 5:49 PM

Nicely done Sara and the Pic is a perfect match. Good luck in the contest . Well done. God Bless, JB

Sara Kendrick

April 7, 2021 at 6:08 AM

Judy, Thanks for your best wishes. Your kind review is uplifting. Sara

Victor Buhagiar

April 5, 2021 at 7:46 AM

Loved your pleiad. You composed it in a masterful way.

Sara Kendrick

April 5, 2021 at 2:43 PM

Victor, Thanks for the kind review of my work. Sara

Alexis Y.

April 4, 2021 at 1:48 PM

Hi Sara, You penned a Pleiades with letter O. Best wishes in the contest. Have a great day:-) Alexis

Sara Kendrick

April 4, 2021 at 1:55 PM

Alexis, Yes and she is saying oh! too much of the time now. Thanks for the visit to my page. Sara

Ann Foster

April 4, 2021 at 11:05 AM

So sad, so true. Great write. Ann

Sara Kendrick

April 4, 2021 at 1:44 PM

Ann, Yes, there is truth in aging is not for sissies. Encouraging me is your presence at my page. Sara

Heidi Sands

April 4, 2021 at 10:16 AM

I have seen many good ones today, written in this challenging form. This is so good too. Well done :)

Sara Kendrick

April 4, 2021 at 1:43 PM

Heidi, I had noticed several on here but did not know there was a contest until I looked this morning. I thought I would try. I am delighted that you dropped by. Sara