Obscure

Sometimes I sit on my loneliness
In a place full of quietness
and Listen as my heartbeat
to the rythm of time
And dream that one of the days
A voice trapped in my inside
Will come out as loud as thunder
To make a sudden impact
To be admired by the whole world
And free me from this
Prison of obscurity
I sit there and wonder
If really the talent I possess
Is the right weapon
To hunt for this desired success
And start to feel my confidence
Repelled by demoralizing thoughts
And feel myself a tiny star
tiny enough not to be seen
Yet I do not stop dreaming
Of one day being freed
from this prison of obscurity
Copyright © | Year Posted 2010

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Brown Avatar
April 19, 2012 at 11:32 AM
Stopping by to say Thank You for your kind comments on my poetry Bojosi. It is a pleasure to read your writings. Have a wonderful day. Love, Carol
Mogotsi Avatar
February 16, 2011 at 10:23 PM
Very easy to relate with..i see that at times in my own life ;-( but i guess you just have to keep the faith that it will turn out okay
Cheeseman Avatar
August 24, 2010 at 6:35 AM
Well written and many a time I have sat myself, not looking for fame just myself Thanks
Strand Avatar
August 22, 2010 at 7:01 AM
Like the imagery here Bojosi especially L10.A unique talent.Rgds BRian
Dietrich Avatar
August 13, 2010 at 9:08 PM
wow,this poem is so relatable. I feel like this too sometimes. The dream to become famous for what we do!! You are a very good writer, Bojosi. One little suggestion for this poem: use "sit" for "seat" (sit is the verb) I hope to read more and more of your beautiful poems. LUv, Andrea
Kendrick Avatar
August 12, 2010 at 9:42 AM
Interesting write that you have penned here in this one..Last two lines if one adds goals to those dreams, dreams might become possible..Thanks for stopping by and commenting on my work..Sara
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August 12, 2010 at 7:19 AM
There are times we all experience self-doubts, but don't let them stand in the way of pursuing your goals. It's just the nature of life, Bojosi. A great poem to which we can all relate. Thanks for your comments on my poem. Best wishes, Carolyn
Brown Avatar
August 9, 2010 at 11:51 AM
I was gone and did not read any poetry the past weekend. So I am trying to get some read today. I am pleased that yours is among what I have read today and I have enjoyed reading it. I hope you have a wonderful week filled with inspiration Bojosi. Love, Carol
Rhinem Avatar
August 9, 2010 at 2:55 AM
Smile ~ You have a very beautiful heartbeat I can tell and, if You keep writing like this my dear friend; from the depths of Your Beautiful Soul then, I have a very good feeling for You that, chances are very great that, You surely shall see Your Dream someday come to pass ~ "Very Endearingly Beautiful" ~ "My Love & Warmth Always, to You & Your Loves," John! ~ Smile, "Have A Very Beautiful Day My Friend;" Bye!:) ~
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