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Obese

Oscar chomped chocolate
Oreos and candy
Opera cake and buns
Oxford blue and oysters
Oblivious that his
Obsession with food risks
Obesity for life


Pleiades O Poetry Contest

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6 per line checked with HMS

05/03/21
Copyright © | Year Posted 2021

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Koplin Avatar
April 10, 2021 at 5:53 AM
well done Jan, now I'm hungry!
Flaherty Avatar
April 9, 2021 at 11:16 AM
O yes indeed Jan My Dad always said You can't do much about or choose your face and looks But your size is up to you
Goldsmith Avatar
April 7, 2021 at 3:25 PM
Congratulations on your win. A real sweet write/winner. Have a blessed day.............
Wolf Avatar
April 7, 2021 at 3:15 PM
Congrats on your win in the contest, Jan... I myself am now hovering near the obesity needle on the scale. Your poem is a nice prod for me. ~ Treadmill time
Dietrich Avatar
April 7, 2021 at 3:06 PM
Jan, this is a fun one. Get ready for P if it's coming next!! Congrats.
Merryman Avatar
April 7, 2021 at 2:09 PM
Jan, congrats on your win in my contest with your creative pleaides! Blessings, Kim M
Kendrick Avatar
April 7, 2021 at 3:27 AM
Poor Oscar. Just a tweak in his diet would save him from early death. He was lovin' the journey though. Congrats on this winner. Way to go. Sara
Roper Avatar
April 6, 2021 at 10:28 PM
Great write, Jan, congratulations on your Pleiades win. Eve
Y. Avatar
April 6, 2021 at 9:53 PM
Hi Jan, I’m just coming back to say congratulations on your winning write. Have a good evening:-) Alexis
Ball Avatar
April 6, 2021 at 10:02 AM
Excellent use of the O letter with an important message. Well Done. God Bless, JB
Kavanagh  Avatar
April 6, 2021 at 6:27 AM
Great poem Jan, it’s a very sad condition, especially seeing young people struggling, just walking to their gate and back, it’s definitely 95% a psychological disorder, the other 5% are probably like Oscar, I hope this one will be a winner in the contest, cheers David
Cunningham Avatar
April 6, 2021 at 5:41 AM
Not forgetting all the fillings at the dentist lol. Good luck Tom
Mcintosh Avatar
April 6, 2021 at 2:32 AM
That's sad... obesity is sad... I know it is a struggle some can't ever seem to escape. God bless you with a win with this gem. Love, Gina
Faulkner Avatar
April 5, 2021 at 2:12 PM
I love Oreos, thought about doing one about them - just don't know what opera cake and Oxford blue is? Guess it's popular across the pond :)
Bauer Avatar
April 5, 2021 at 12:37 PM
wow, jan - i just read another entry for this contest that was so different from yours and i enjoyed yours just as much. very creative! best of luck in the contest...
Allison Avatar
April 5, 2021 at 1:22 PM
Thanks Ilene:-_) hugs Jan xx
Leffanta Avatar
April 5, 2021 at 12:16 PM
Reminds me of one of my accountants whose desk bottom drawer was like a candy store from which he extracted "treats" from nine-to-five, when he waddled home .....I always wondered how he managed to father children ......Perhaps it was the Easter Bunny? Good luck in the contest! Aloha! Rico
Allison Avatar
April 5, 2021 at 1:20 PM
ha ha ha:-) hugs jan xx
Krutsinger Avatar
April 5, 2021 at 12:09 PM
I am truly trying to figure out if I can do something similar? This is a tough act to follow Jan! The answer is no.
Allison Avatar
April 5, 2021 at 1:19 PM
You will do an amazing poem Caren:-) hugs jan xx
Y. Avatar
April 5, 2021 at 11:42 AM
Hi Jan, Good use of the “ O”s . Good take and chosen topic. I saw several of my favorites in your photo. However, I don’t eat them as much as I used to. Best wishes in the contest. I hope you had a Happy Easter. Have a wonderful day:-) Alexis
Allison Avatar
April 5, 2021 at 1:18 PM
Thanks Alexis I made my son an easter egg with a terrys chocolate orange and some mini eggs in it, its nice to spoil him at Easter:-) hugs Jan xx
Hankins Avatar
April 5, 2021 at 9:53 AM
A winner for sure. Very interesting take on the contest, Jan. Good luck!
Allison Avatar
April 5, 2021 at 1:17 PM
Thanks Milton I was struggling for inspiration!:-) hugs Jan xx
Devonshire Avatar
April 5, 2021 at 8:58 AM
I hope you had some delicious treats for Easter, Jan. Love the way you wrote this. Obesity is a "growing" problem, apparently world wide. Best wishes for a win. Hugs, Carolyn
Allison Avatar
April 5, 2021 at 1:17 PM
It certainly is a huge problem:-( hugs Jan xx
Buhagiar Avatar
April 5, 2021 at 6:24 AM
Go for an early morning run, Jan and keep your figure. Lovely pleiad.
Allison Avatar
April 5, 2021 at 6:46 AM
lol I walk everywhere Victor and try to reduce sugar with hubbies diabetes :-) hugs jan xx
Callus Avatar
April 5, 2021 at 5:19 AM
I like the attractive look of candy in jars and chocolate wrappers, but fortunately I stop there, avoiding temptation!:) I enjoyed this Pleiades, Jan, even though no Snickers are mentioned :) Hugs // paul
Allison Avatar
April 5, 2021 at 5:50 AM
gosh not had a snickers in the longest time lol probably last time I was in Malta lol, hope you all had a lovely Easter:-) hugs to all Jan xx
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