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Oscar chomped chocolate Oreos and candy Opera cake and buns Oxford blue and oysters Oblivious that his Obsession with food risks Obesity for life Pleiades O Poetry Contest Sponsored by Kim Merryman 6 per line checked with HMS 05/03/21

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Mark Koplin

Date: 4/10/2021 5:53:00 AM

well done Jan, now I'm hungry!

Christopher Flaherty

Date: 4/9/2021 11:16:00 AM

O yes indeed Jan My Dad always said You can't do much about or choose your face and looks But your size is up to you

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 4/7/2021 3:25:00 PM

Congratulations on your win. A real sweet write/winner. Have a blessed day.............

Gershon Wolf

Date: 4/7/2021 3:15:00 PM

Congrats on your win in the contest, Jan... I myself am now hovering near the obesity needle on the scale. Your poem is a nice prod for me. ~ Treadmill time

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/7/2021 3:06:00 PM

Jan, this is a fun one. Get ready for P if it's coming next!! Congrats.

Kim Merryman

Date: 4/7/2021 2:09:00 PM

Jan, congrats on your win in my contest with your creative pleaides! Blessings, Kim M

Sara Kendrick

Date: 4/7/2021 3:27:00 AM

Poor Oscar. Just a tweak in his diet would save him from early death. He was lovin' the journey though. Congrats on this winner. Way to go. Sara

Eve Roper

Date: 4/6/2021 10:28:00 PM

Great write, Jan, congratulations on your Pleiades win. Eve

Alexis Y.

Date: 4/6/2021 9:53:00 PM

Hi Jan, I’m just coming back to say congratulations on your winning write. Have a good evening:-) Alexis

Judy Ball

Date: 4/6/2021 10:02:00 AM

Excellent use of the O letter with an important message. Well Done. God Bless, JB

David Kavanagh

Date: 4/6/2021 6:27:00 AM

Great poem Jan, it’s a very sad condition, especially seeing young people struggling, just walking to their gate and back, it’s definitely 95% a psychological disorder, the other 5% are probably like Oscar, I hope this one will be a winner in the contest, cheers David

Tom Cunningham

Date: 4/6/2021 5:41:00 AM

Not forgetting all the fillings at the dentist lol. Good luck Tom

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 4/6/2021 2:32:00 AM

That's sad... obesity is sad... I know it is a struggle some can't ever seem to escape. God bless you with a win with this gem. Love, Gina

Michelle Faulkner

Date: 4/5/2021 2:12:00 PM

I love Oreos, thought about doing one about them - just don't know what opera cake and Oxford blue is? Guess it's popular across the pond :)

Ilene Bauer

Date: 4/5/2021 12:37:00 PM

wow, jan - i just read another entry for this contest that was so different from yours and i enjoyed yours just as much. very creative! best of luck in the contest...

Jan Allison
Date: 4/5/2021 1:22:00 PM

Thanks Ilene:-_) hugs Jan xx

Rico Leffanta

Date: 4/5/2021 12:16:00 PM

Reminds me of one of my accountants whose desk bottom drawer was like a candy store from which he extracted "treats" from nine-to-five, when he waddled home .....I always wondered how he managed to father children ......Perhaps it was the Easter Bunny? Good luck in the contest! Aloha! Rico

Jan Allison
Date: 4/5/2021 1:20:00 PM

ha ha ha:-) hugs jan xx

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 4/5/2021 12:09:00 PM

I am truly trying to figure out if I can do something similar? This is a tough act to follow Jan! The answer is no.

Jan Allison
Date: 4/5/2021 1:19:00 PM

You will do an amazing poem Caren:-) hugs jan xx

Alexis Y.

Date: 4/5/2021 11:42:00 AM

Hi Jan, Good use of the “ O”s . Good take and chosen topic. I saw several of my favorites in your photo. However, I don’t eat them as much as I used to. Best wishes in the contest. I hope you had a Happy Easter. Have a wonderful day:-) Alexis

Jan Allison
Date: 4/5/2021 1:18:00 PM

Thanks Alexis I made my son an easter egg with a terrys chocolate orange and some mini eggs in it, its nice to spoil him at Easter:-) hugs Jan xx

L Milton Hankins

Date: 4/5/2021 9:53:00 AM

A winner for sure. Very interesting take on the contest, Jan. Good luck!

Jan Allison
Date: 4/5/2021 1:17:00 PM

Thanks Milton I was struggling for inspiration!:-) hugs Jan xx

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 4/5/2021 8:58:00 AM

I hope you had some delicious treats for Easter, Jan. Love the way you wrote this. Obesity is a "growing" problem, apparently world wide. Best wishes for a win. Hugs, Carolyn

Jan Allison
Date: 4/5/2021 1:17:00 PM

It certainly is a huge problem:-( hugs Jan xx

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 4/5/2021 6:24:00 AM

Go for an early morning run, Jan and keep your figure. Lovely pleiad.

Jan Allison
Date: 4/5/2021 6:46:00 AM

lol I walk everywhere Victor and try to reduce sugar with hubbies diabetes :-) hugs jan xx

Paul Callus

Date: 4/5/2021 5:19:00 AM

I like the attractive look of candy in jars and chocolate wrappers, but fortunately I stop there, avoiding temptation!:) I enjoyed this Pleiades, Jan, even though no Snickers are mentioned :) Hugs // paul

Jan Allison
Date: 4/5/2021 5:50:00 AM

gosh not had a snickers in the longest time lol probably last time I was in Malta lol, hope you all had a lovely Easter:-) hugs to all Jan xx