Kyle Kriticos Poet Free verse

Numb

Green eyes, shaggy hair
Split up lips that gasp for air 
Twenty beers and a lawn chair

Mother left, brother died
Doesn't know where he'll sleep tonight
Twenty beers on ice

The sharp whistle of a train
Brings to mind his bro again
His little bro, his best friend

At night he's gone 
No sign till dawn
Just Twenty empty bottles on the lawn

By Kyle Ezra Kriticos

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Gina Young September 16, 2013 at 8:40 PM This is very good! Like the imagery, and it makes me feel empty in a way...and yet hopeful too.

Skat A July 3, 2013 at 11:58 PM one big wow! SKAT

Andrea Dietrich January 11, 2013 at 1:57 PM yes, I can really sense the "numbness" to this one. You really captured that tone so well, love the image of the 20 beers on the lawn. I know people who numb themselves this way. many in society. How nice to see some of your work.