Now I Lay Me Down To Sleep

Everyday, to God I pray For answers to Life's enigmas Patience lays in wait to stay- To cleanse our Social Stigmas We pass the time in our idle Dreams: Like fallen Stars in singing streams

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Richard Lamoureux

Date: 3/6/2014 9:24:00 AM

I like the play on words. Bravo Chan! If you get a chance check out my poem "You Can't" it deals with Social Stigmas.

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 3/6/2014 10:40:00 AM

Thanks, Richard; I will take a look at your piece in just a few. Always happy to have a visit from you :)

Robin Davis

Date: 2/21/2014 8:51:00 AM

Chan The Man This is a very unique and brilliant write. We all want to find the answers to life's questions, but sometimes it just takes a while. Nicely done Thanks for the amazing comment on my Two Friends And A Puppy poem. Hugs

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 2/21/2014 10:54:00 AM

No prob, hon. Thanks for dropping by, Sweet Pea :)

Victoria Anderson-Throop

Date: 8/26/2013 4:30:00 PM

last line is lovely..."Like fallen Stars in singing streams"

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 8/26/2013 5:59:00 PM

Thanks, hon :)

John Loving Iii

Date: 8/23/2013 9:26:00 PM

And a mind. A mind you have. If you just take time and let your muse rhyme.

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 8/24/2013 10:28:00 AM

Of course many times I have gone back to re-edit, but as far as adding to it, I rarely feel compelled to do so.

Just That Archaic Poet
Date: 8/24/2013 10:27:00 AM

Thank you for reading and reviewing, John. I am hearing this critique from several people, that they wish I would extend my pieces, but I have great difficulty with this. I would liken it to a painter. Did the Mona Lisa, for instance, need one more brush stroke, one more detail? I'm in no way suggesting this piece is a masterpiece (it's clearly not) and I probably should not juxtapose the two, but what I am saying is this: when a poem feels complete to me, it feels complete.

John Loving Iii

Date: 8/23/2013 9:21:00 PM

I can complete this for a collaboration. I come highly recommended.

John Loving Iii
Date: 8/23/2013 9:23:00 PM

Your good but impatient. . You could go much deeper but it takes time.