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Not So Loud

The noise is deafening It swarms about Like trapped minnows in a bowl Feeding on growing insanity [a parisite] Hands hold a head Trying to block out The swarm of angry wasps Growing louder With each beating second of butterfly wings A scream joins the chorus Cutting through the salty waves of sound With thick ridged ice Leaving silence in its wake Almost as boisterous as the beginning had been Screams sound again [more clearly] peircing the reality Pulling to the shadows to watch The screams echo over In the mind A battelfeild of claustrophobia Pulling out hair [with insanity] Screaming in the silence For something thats not so loud

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009




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Date: 7/8/2009 7:12:00 PM
Amazing so intense and very descriptive... You had my heart racing... Great write!
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Date: 6/11/2009 11:14:00 AM
hmm.. it sounds more like a hangover maybe? lol. uhh, I felt like that when I went to a concert.. i was sick but it was for free and my dad wanted to go. so he took me and my brother... i suffered greatly with a blazing headache. haha. Enjoyed your poem. thank you for your comments. -brit
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Date: 6/11/2009 10:46:00 AM
I'm not really sure. I just know it was REALLY loud there. and then the noise stopped. and it felt even louder. i think i was writing this with a headach. like...this is kinda how i feel when i get my migrains, or when i get clausterfobic...im not really sure though.
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Date: 6/11/2009 10:35:00 AM
I did see Black Sabbath once and was it loud! Interesting write - where is the noise coming from in your poem? | Yours Matthew Anish
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