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Shadows of the Valley contest

He lived on this earth for a time and a half Playing a tune to the old man’s laugh —Shadows of the Valley; Janick Gers, Stephen Percy Harris Not His Son The flute floated in the empty space He’d gladly have followed the piper Red lights of dischord in sentiment face In corner mocks the chatterbox viper To be spoon fed kindness for a time The old man thought that but a waste He paid me instead time and a half…I’m on a bender, long cast, no longer chaste The IT of a clown from the grave rises He whips me with his uttermost laugh A fearful rainstorm he always despises Surviving my loathsome birth like chaff The lip-tremble of melody craved abduction An abominable shadow from dirt’s abyss For this host could be only a demon’s seduction The only arms that held me tight he’d dismiss The door like a drum opened up righteousness The climax of throwdown with cuffs and chains In my enemies presence I dine with timelessness I claim a different Father - in heaven he reigns

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Date: 5/16/2025 5:21:00 PM
Only righteousness could overcome a demon's seduction. Wow Kim you took inspiration from Iron Maiden's song and made it better! Best of luck for the contest. This is a great contender.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 5/16/2025 7:35:00 PM
Thank you SV! I appreciate your comment!
Date: 5/14/2025 8:43:00 AM
"Red lights of dischord in sentiment face" wow, Kim, I loved that - and the whole ending stanza is just freedom itself, could feel the ache of chains, lifted up into the light of your heavenly Father <3
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 5/14/2025 10:17:00 AM
Thank you, Paige!
Date: 5/13/2025 6:10:00 PM
Cool, a floating flute, and a mocking chatterbox viper!
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 5/13/2025 7:09:00 PM
Thank you, David! Glad you liked those parts.
Date: 5/13/2025 8:17:00 AM
Dear Kim, how haunting and powerful and how each stanza wrestles with shadows, legacy, and the ache for belonging. I felt the pain of being measured by someone else’s standards, the longing for kindness, and the hard-won claim of a different Father. You’ve turned struggle into something brave and honest. Spring Blessings, My Dear Friend, Daniel
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 5/13/2025 9:08:00 AM
Thank you so much! Will check out your poetry later. Have to go to aqua therapy and losing track of time with writing…lol

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