Robin Davis Poet Rhyme

Not Built Strong Enough

Erector sets and wooden blocks
Dominoes and house of cards
Built way up to be knocked down
Scattered all across the ground
Model cars and airplane kits
Making sure each piece will fit
Snapped together without glue
Just to fall apart on you
Puzzles without all the pieces
Will not work and it decreases
The fun and joy of finishing
A picture without it's full scene
All these things can fall apart
Or not be finished from the start
Like a love without the trust
Which is a necessary must
So it doesn't break and tremble
And you have to reassemble
Two hearts with a solid glue
So it doesn't fall on you
From a height that is too high
To complete---you let it die
From a lack of love and care
Broken too much for repair

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Andrea Dietrich June 22, 2014 at 6:27 PM this is your SECOND best poem, according to the list of Best poems of Robin Davis. but for me, it's a number one. I am gonna fave this one. I had never seen it before and honestly it is one of your best because of the way you set up the comparison of broken love with the broken toys and games.

Cherl Dunn April 6, 2014 at 1:45 PM This makes me think of the old story about an egg, a wall, and army lol don't know why both your write and this story apply to each other through and also they share a common truth to them. well done my friend, cheri

Mohammad Yamin October 16, 2013 at 2:34 PM An enchanting write -beautiful similes and metaphors. Admirable approach on the concept of true love. Thanks Robin for visiting my poem The Paint Brush for your kind words of appreciation. It is said and how true it is that the beauty lies in the eye of the beholder. To admire a beauty one needs discerning eyes which God has gifted you. Thanks and God bless you. -Mohammad.

Len Gasun October 16, 2013 at 8:04 AM Your excellent poem said all about love my dear friend Robin-the absolute truth in here. Well done my dear friend. So love it and so enjoyed. I'll fave this one if you don't mind. Thank you so much for sharing. Thank you as well for your precious time reading my Christmas Poem. Have a grace-filled day! love lots and big hugs, Leonora

Richard Lamoureux October 15, 2013 at 8:30 PM This one made me think of building towers with my son and how gleeful he would be when he knocked them down. I enjoyed this one Robin.

Poet Destroyer A October 15, 2013 at 7:34 PM hi Robin, nice piece. deep, makes me think of pulling through rough times. ..luv..linda