Not a Man Anymore

A tiny Heart pain and now I'm less than a man Right side numb Can't write

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Derrick Burton

Date: 5/16/2010 6:44:00 AM

Wow, sounds like a stroke, my cousin younger than me and I'm 31 had one of those and he had the same problem. Hope you are cool and I doubt if anyone would consider you a lesser man because of that. Have a great Sunday.:)

Lynette Chachere

Date: 5/15/2010 5:12:00 PM

is the 'tiny heart' expressing how it gets smaller as the pain deepens. . .a very sad poem. i wish for your night to end well. . i love you always spirit brother. -Always&Forever your sister spirit Lynn

Audrey Haick

Date: 5/15/2010 2:48:00 PM

Excellent Haiku, HG! I didn't know you were ill, my friend..my SM hasn't work so I'm out of touch a bit...Anyway, I am so happy that you're recovering..God bless you and take it easy..HG..slowly, but surely, you'll become your old self..keep faith..ok? Love, Audrey

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 5/15/2010 8:15:00 AM

sorrowful write, nice one

Carrie Richards

Date: 5/15/2010 6:44:00 AM

This is a sobering poem....I hope you are okay, HG. Wishing you the best! ~ Carrie

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 5/15/2010 6:43:00 AM

So sorry you have been suffering not only from illness, but from difficulty in writing, HG. It seems you've posted some new work recently though, so I'm praying for a quick recovery. My best wishes are always with you. Love, Carolyn

Sara Kendrick

Date: 5/15/2010 6:23:00 AM

Not sure about the meaning of this one...Keep the creative pen flowing...Sara

Barbara Gorelick

Date: 5/15/2010 5:29:00 AM

see your mail NOW! BG

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 5/15/2010 3:30:00 AM

Wonderful senryu - nice images.