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Pitch-black night—
scintillas of supernal light
coalesced before my 
uncomprehending eyes,
opened wide to survey
endless deep.

Heaven’s milky path ablaze,
as never I had glimpsed—
the Galaxy—
remote, yet beckoning.
I spread puny arms
in tremulous embrace.

Slight murmur—
ineffable—imponderably deep.
And I seemed to hear:
“Gaze a moment more,
and I will thwart your insanity,”
for I was overwhelmed.

6th Place, Brief Unforgettable Moment, Nette Onclaud
Copyright © | Year Posted 2013

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Jerden Avatar
January 27, 2014 at 9:05 PM
Yes, a moment shared, separated only by time and distance. Lovely.
Peterson Avatar
January 27, 2014 at 11:09 PM
This was unforgettable. I'd been staring at the sky my whole life and always just saw the hazy band. This night it became the galaxy.
Cannon Avatar
December 2, 2013 at 6:42 PM
Loved your poem...congratulations on your win
Peterson Avatar
December 7, 2013 at 12:56 AM
Jan, thank you so much for stopping by. I appreciate your words of praise. Sorry it took so long for me to comment.
Jones Avatar
November 29, 2013 at 10:39 PM
A remarkable poem..congratulations
Peterson Avatar
November 30, 2013 at 1:55 PM
Donna, your words of appreciation mean so much to me. Congratulations on your win as well. Sublime poem you wrote. See my comments.
Andresen Avatar
November 29, 2013 at 12:06 PM
- Congratulations on your winning poem in: - BRIEF, UNFORGETTABLE MOMENT / / Nette Onclaud contest. - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)
Peterson Avatar
November 30, 2013 at 1:57 PM
Thanks, Lyse. You had a nice win as well with your wonderful poem. See my comments.
Almurisi Avatar
November 22, 2013 at 11:35 AM
I can't expess the poem talks itslef ..very nice
Peterson Avatar
November 22, 2013 at 12:15 PM
Naji, Thank you so very much for glancing at my poem, an experience I had while driving in the middle of the night. I stopped and saw the Milky Way so perfectly, it astonished me. I worked in astronomy for many years, so this was unexpected. I look forward to reading your verse.
Bauer Avatar
November 5, 2013 at 6:42 AM
this poem truly describes something awesome - in the way the word was originally meant to be used. living in the city, i rarely get to see a sky such as this and i wish i had the chance to do so more often.
Peterson Avatar
January 3, 2014 at 1:29 AM
Another comment that I failed to respond to. Sorry Ilene, I appreciate you words so much. Glad I can inspire.
That Archaic Poet Avatar
November 2, 2013 at 12:02 PM
Really cool piece and again, a pleasure to read. You are quite skillful with your words, and you seem patient and precise when penning them. Kudos! :)
Peterson Avatar
January 3, 2014 at 1:28 AM
Boy I let your comment go a long time. Sorry about that. Sometimes I miss commenting, Chan. I appreciate these words of yours so much.
Matose Avatar
October 30, 2013 at 12:55 PM
This is my second visit to this poem, just for the purpose of breaking "bad" news about this poem which inspired my latest one entitled: Frailty of Power and Strength of the Modest. Thanks for being so inspirational. Friend & Loyal Follower, JM
Peterson Avatar
January 3, 2014 at 1:27 AM
Sorry I didn't get around to responding to your comments earlier. Just lost track. I am honored that you would find inspiration in my work. See you soon.
Matose Avatar
October 30, 2013 at 12:15 AM
GREAT POEM MARK. A GREAT TRIBUTE TO THE POWER OF CREATOR AND INFLUENCE NATURE BESTOWS. I'M ALSO INSPIRED BY NATURE- I CONSIDER IT THE GREATEST TEACHER.
Peterson Avatar
October 30, 2013 at 12:20 AM
Thanks Joseph. This poem was inspired by a very dark, middle of the night drive through Eastern Oregon. It was April, and the Milky Way was directly overhead at the time. Although I spent half a life in astronomy, I don't believe I ever truly 'got it' until that night. Amazing!
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