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Nine Eleven

Nine Eleven

Alas , oh monoliths, that once stood tall 
above the great metropolis 
that housed human souls like carnival balloons
and the children would release them in the air
never to be seen again

The world is rife with Gods and Demons
who disguise themselves as 
good and evil and which to choose
and who will lose
but we are all collateral

Oh, that violence would erupt 
in the name of Gods and  Demons
the monoliths have been destroyed
releasing the balloons in the air
as spheres toward heaven

Will they touch each other good or bad
 in peace as they drift up toward their paradise
or will they pass each other upward
never to be seen again
© Ralph Sergi
(REVISED)

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A. Juman Date: 10/24/2015 2:19:00 AM Ralph this is excellent- but for me it was not Gods and demons. It was people and demons. God slept that day. I use to go up trade center 1 three times a week. still cant believe all those people I knew just died all at once. I wrote several poems for 9-11 but it will take me a year to find them. Login to Reply Ralph Sergi Date: 10/24/2015 8:02:00 AM Hi A: Since you knew some of those peole , I can believe it was more personal to you. the credo the people had who did this was a God they were sacrificing for. I used metaphors instead.

Nette Onclaud Date: 9/21/2015 12:05:00 PM this is so striking I recall the 9/11 terror when no one knew gods from demons.. beautiful!.. huggs Login to Reply

Emile Pinet Date: 9/19/2015 12:19:00 PM Your poem falls within the category of metamorphic, fanciful and imaginative; armed with an energy of its own that propels it into our sphere of reality. Emile. Login to Reply

Sandra Haight Date: 9/18/2015 7:53:00 PM Very powerful feelings expressed through emotional metaphors in your poem, Ralph. It touched my heart. Sandra Login to Reply

Andrea Dietrich Date: 9/16/2015 12:29:00 AM Yes, ralph, it does seem as though that would have been a good time for poets to take out their 9/11 poems from the past. I did one but it was really bad and I am embarrassed to post it! Login to Reply Ralph Sergi Date: 9/16/2015 9:17:00 AM Hi, Andrea: Thanks for your response but after reading all your poems, I can't imagine you writing a bad poem.

Kp Nunez Date: 9/14/2015 12:35:00 PM A unique, well-written poem in remembrance of 9/11. Sharp images and interesting metaphors you used, Ralph. Login to Reply

Margaret Franceschini Date: 9/13/2015 5:45:00 PM thank you for your personal tribute to those we lost, very emotional to read and i'm sure to write. "10" hugs Login to Reply

Andrea Dietrich Date: 9/12/2015 12:02:00 AM this is very nice . It is the kind of remembrance poem that is different which means it is much more interesting than the standard fare. I like it VERY much. Login to Reply Ralph Sergi Date: 9/12/2015 7:41:00 AM Thank you, Andrea: I'm surprised that other poets haven't written about 911 or at least I haven't seen any. Ralph Sergi Date: 9/12/2015 7:40:00 AM Thank you, Andrea: I'm surprised that other parts haven't written any poems about 911.

Dan Cwiak Date: 9/10/2015 11:12:00 AM Interesting use of metaphor here as I never would have thought of souls as balloons in the air. Nice write in reminding of what mankind has done to itself. Login to Reply Ralph Sergi Date: 9/10/2015 11:51:00 AM Thank you , Dan: I didn't want to point the finger at anyone or any religion except to say that anything that kills people indiscriminately has a perverse belief that it's ok.

Michael Tor Date: 9/10/2015 9:46:00 AM It was one of the saddest days I can recall. I remember my mom calling me and telling me we were under attack. Those poor souls in those buildings. It was horrifying. . I have heard the phone calls that were recorded before the buildings collapse. Sickening. Did you know that one of the buildings (7) went down without being touched by a jet? Figure that one out. Ralph please check out" Loose Change" documentary on 911. If you haven't seen it yet. Great write here! Demons in disguise caused it. Login to Reply Ralph Sergi Date: 9/10/2015 11:54:00 AM Hi Michael, thank you. I wrote this not too much longer after this tragic incident and it really has changed the way the world thinks about the middle east in the last 14 years.But paranoia will destroy ya.

Michael Tor Date: 9/10/2015 9:35:00 AM Ralph so true, wow! I love your message put so eloquently, speaking volumes. Showing hope (maybe) in the end. Incredible write. A ten, three above a seven. So many wonderful poets on this site including yourself. I want to read and experience their truths and wisdom. Wish there were 30 hours in a day maybe I could do so. lol. Congratulations on this one. Applause!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Login to Reply