Nightscapes - Part 1

Nightscapes

...inspired by 'Rhapsody On A Windy Night' 
       by T.S. Eliot


Late night summons
madmen, madams, bold streetwalkers,
picking pennies from the gutters
as the merchants close their shutters
and the homeless crouch in doorways
in their rags, against the cold.
Black or white, no compromise,
no colours bathe the empty streets,
as Bobbies tread their lonely beats,
the watchmen rub their crusted eyes
and settle into vigilance,
no accident, no happenstance.

Midnight passes.
Leila in her bursting bodice
lingers, guesses who I am
and flaunts her body, all the same
to her, a customer who'll pay
for twenty minutes' satisfaction.
Dressed in taffeta and lace,
she'll never even see my face,
night's sweet anonymity,
the very definition of her name.

Later, as the moonbeams shift,
and cloudlines disappear and drift,
come images in stark relief
of twisted metal, broken things
that catch the eye, suspend belief.
Abandoned buildings, hollow-eyed
and winking in a death mask grip,
skeletal, once filled with pride,
now empty, and for ever tongue-tied,
cadavered, and condemned to drip.

Still later, the street-lamp spots
the cats a'creeping, worldly-wise,
and rats along the quayside waiting,
ready for the avalanche
of waste into the yawning dumpsters. 
I have seen the children sneaking out
before the dawn comes crawling,
dirty little ragamuffins forced
into leftover clothes,
weepy-eyed and snotty-nosed,
playing with a rotting carcass
or a broken bicycle.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2008


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Date: 5/17/2010 10:02:00 PM
This is freakin' perfect, honestly. Almost exactly how I would view the dregs of London in another time. Wonderful piece.
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Date: 5/5/2009 11:22:00 AM
What a truly remarkable literary portrait! I confess that I had not read 'Rhapsody On A Windy Night', but having read this felt the need to. You capture so well the loneliness & solitude in a desperate stark world that Elliot himself portrays. The references to prostitution and twisted metal etc are a nice touch too. I must say though, that my favourite has to be of yawning dumpsters: it's one of those lines that will always stay with me. You astound me Keith x
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Date: 4/30/2009 9:42:00 AM
Dear Keith, YOUR Emulation of T.S. is so precise The vividness of part 1 is so 19th century London YOU make me feel like I,m standing on the street corner watching this POETIC movie "Yawning Dumpsters, dirty little ragamuffins" The sadness of the times I ask are you published? if not YOU should Be If YOU write a book as many of YOUR contemporaries suggest I would also buy it I did not realize how many POEMS YOU have written I definitely have to find time to read m YOUR splendid works ALWAYS..HG
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Date: 3/22/2009 12:41:00 PM
Well well well mr. sir~ You are a spendid writer/artist. I was impressed with your word cadavered in this....Nice placement~ I loved the moonbeams shifting ...and "CLOUDLINES" These are all really unique things a reader looks for in reading poems over and over by different writers. I liked it very much, it was profound, gut wrenching and well written...Please keep up the good work...Soupers need you...Great write friend, your friend always here at the shhhhhoupie~! Jane
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Date: 2/14/2009 8:45:00 AM
Keith, isn't it amazing how loneliness makes us so aware of everything surrounding us. You are not alone in the crowd and you do not meld with them. Great bard, you are truly a standout. Thanks for your encouragement and Happy Valentine's Day - Carolyn
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Date: 12/12/2008 3:04:00 PM
"...rats along the quayside waiting, ready for the avalanche..." your imagery is concrete and your use of verbs places movement in the right places. When reading oult loud your poetry has great sound, very comfortable to the ear. Keep the great work! Thanks for the encouragement. -Jason
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Date: 12/12/2008 10:07:00 AM
"No colours bathe the empty streets" That evokes such an image and what a wonderful way to say it. Stanza 2 is very well thought out. The subject matter must have been really hard to convey tastefully. A clearly well thought out piece on a very controversial theme! :D Also, thank you for all your flattery, you're much too kind. Nathaniel
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Date: 12/7/2008 9:43:00 AM
I cheated..I read both parts:)) I think that I will read this many times...it's outstanding! A treat for those who who are privledged and lucky to taste its substance. The tone and imagery create a powerful visual scene. You have the gift of throwing up a projectory screen with your words. This is an amazing piece..truly. I'm in awe! Thanks again for your thoughts and encouragement..they are much appreciated!:) Wishing you the best Keith..God bless you and yours! Love, Mikki
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Date: 11/24/2008 12:56:00 PM
Holy smokes, man, this is absolutly awesome. The flow, the tone, the rhyme, the words, this is excellent, and Eliot himself would be honoured I'm sure. I'm wowed. you are my new favorite poet. :) Love Kristin
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