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Night Sky

Behold, a crack in the sky... Its a star ! And then it multiplies... A thousand million silver twinkling confetti... Galactical milk in celestial ballet Your white bedazzle takes the breath away Soapsudded moon and underwater candellabra In an ocean of quiet delivery Oozes a rhapsody, nay a symphony! Gliding on golden orbital slide A bridal comet gown on fluted notes MAGNIFICAT! MAGNIFICAT! MAGNIFICAT!

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Jannie Breedt

Date: 9/26/2017 11:40:00 AM

Well thats just plain wonderful . Im thrilled thank you

Patricia Cresswell

Date: 9/26/2017 11:35:00 AM

I came to read again. Its beauty like the firmament will never fade.

Patricia Cresswell

Date: 9/1/2017 7:33:00 AM

I am floating in a pool surrounded by your sky; comets come close to view this strange creature then depart quickly on business in the universe. I remain mesmer's daughter captured. Treasure box.

Jannie Breedt
Date: 9/4/2017 11:22:00 PM

That ,in itself is the makings of a great poem. Its time to renew my PS subscription. Over this past year I have found the dearest friends here and I cou t you among them. Su h a fine lady.Patricia, Thank you for ALL your input in my work.

Pandita Sietesantos

Date: 1/22/2017 5:54:00 PM

Hi Jannie, I love viewing the night sky and you have reflected its great beauty with the amazing imagery you projected in this awesome piece! Bravo and a 7! Beautiful, beautiful, beautiful! Best wishes. Pandita

Jannie Breedt
Date: 9/4/2017 11:19:00 PM

Oh Pandita( what a beautiful name), Alas I only found your wonderfully gracious comment now. I do not understand how it almost went by me. Thank you so much. I value your visit and will soon reciprocate

Phil Capitano

Date: 12/29/2016 7:00:00 AM

Wonderful description of the night sky and I like the way the tempo picked up as you went along.

Jannie Breedt
Date: 12/29/2016 7:12:00 AM

Hi Phil gratitude here. Real nice to have your visit and comment.

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 12/28/2016 3:08:00 AM

Wow Janie...this is one of your best and most beautiful. The imagery in this piece is awesome! A fave for me! ; ) 7

Jannie Breedt
Date: 12/28/2016 6:35:00 AM

Wow Connie. That sure is a nice comment. Here in the bushveld we can see better. Folks in the city miss out on night skies.