New Protector of Rome

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In dense forest we stood to face our foe
German tribes defied our mighty empire
Ready we were to strike the final blow
Unleashing hell with arrows, sword, and fire.

Treachery made me a gladiator
They wanted blood and loved my fighting skill
My fate I blamed on this cruel dictator
Lucius Commodus I vowed to kill.

This world or next I would have my revenge
For wife and son so mercilessly slain
Games final day their deaths I would avenge
My chance had come to end this tyrant’s reign.

With sword I killed this hateful emperor
They appointed me as Rome’s protector.



Date written = January 4th 2019

Movie magic poetry contest

Sponsor =Gregory.R.Barden.

Name of movie= Gladiator

Character= Maximus  Decimus Meridius.

Ending changed to Maximus surviving and becoming protector of Rome.

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Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 3/21/2019 10:33:00 AM

I saw this too long ago to remember how it ends Tom. A great sonnet you have penned. Congratulations on your win! : )

Tom Cunningham
Date: 3/21/2019 10:58:00 AM

Thank you very much Connie. Tom.

Gershon Wolf

Date: 1/6/2019 2:05:00 PM

Simply excellent and excellence, Tom. Should do very well in the contest, I would think. Best of luck there. :) gw

Tom Cunningham
Date: 1/6/2019 2:19:00 PM

Thank you very much Gershon, its in my top ten favourite films. Tom.

Gordon Mcconnell

Date: 1/5/2019 10:55:00 AM

fine piece Tom, well penned with good imagery too. I didn't realise till today that you're a fellow Brit, have a blessed new year, Gordon

Tom Cunningham
Date: 1/5/2019 11:09:00 AM

Thanks very much Gordon, I'm in Worcestershire, born a brummie though. Happy new year to you too. Tom.

P.S. Awtry

Date: 1/4/2019 10:59:00 PM

Tom, that was a great movie! I like your ending! Nice write my friend :)

Tom Cunningham
Date: 1/5/2019 1:37:00 AM

Thanks PS, its one of my favourites, although a bloodthirsty lot the romans have always interested me. Tom.

Vladislav Raven

Date: 1/4/2019 2:08:00 PM

HI Tom, this is such a wonderful write on a wonderful movie. You caught the spirit of the movie and the ending did fit in well. I love the content Tom and I really hope this one does well for you in the contest. Have a wonderful weekend. Your friend always....Mike.

Tom Cunningham
Date: 1/4/2019 3:00:00 PM

Thank you Mike, it is one of my favourites. Shame he didn't live to fulfil the true emperor's dream. Hope you have a great weekend too. Tom.

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 1/4/2019 8:33:00 AM

A well-thought out, well-written missive. I may have to watch the movie now, as you make it sound pretty powerful, Tom, and I am wondering who the star is, and if I have ever seen it?

Tom Cunningham
Date: 1/4/2019 10:24:00 AM

Thanks Caren, Russell Crowe, Oliver Reed, Joaquin Phoenix and Richard Harris were the stars in it, brilliant film. Tom.