Premiere Contest WinnerNever Stopped Wishing

She came into the church with her eyes hung low
Not allowing any of us more than a glimpse of her well-built wall
Sat in the pew in her white dress, moving rather slow
I had an inkling of who she might be, but was not sure at all 

I knew she had been through a lot, a horrible ordeal they said. 
I said some prayers for her soul, but did not stop or stare
Clandescently sequestered, she looked down at the hymnal red.
I felt Jesus put a hand on my shoulder, and give me a dare.

But I was too frightened of her emotions, I felt a kind of fear.
I knew she was His child, and I wished I had been brave. 
But when I looked back, she was gone, this simple sweet dear.
I shuddered as I thought of how close she had come to the grave.

One thing for sure, this encounter changed me that day.
I am much more apt to go answer Jesus’s call in the air.
Because I have never stopped wishing I had found a way
To ask her how she was doing, and let her know that I care. 

Written 12-18-2020
Contest:  A rhyme story poem with eyes
Sponsor: Mystic Rose Rose
Copyright © | Year Posted 2020

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Kavanagh  Avatar
December 26, 2020 at 9:05 AM
Heya Caren, I too looked at this photo, but could not find any words to try explain what on earth was going on in her mind, now I realize after reading your absolute deserving winner, it was something unspeakable and terrible, yet was more about others reaction or inaction to offer help, congratulations cheers David
Krutsinger Avatar
December 26, 2020 at 12:53 PM
Thank you David. I appreciate it.
Seeker Avatar
December 25, 2020 at 10:45 PM
Empathy and compassion oozing from each line! Beautiful! Congrats on your win!
Krutsinger Avatar
December 26, 2020 at 3:25 AM
Thank you Unseeking Seeker
Ermine Avatar
December 25, 2020 at 2:49 PM
Caren, massive Congratulations. You are the peoples' writer. Giving an impression of ease in telling situation and reaction. Your poem is straightforward but haunting. A deserved top Win on exclusive list.
Krutsinger Avatar
December 26, 2020 at 3:25 AM
Thank you so much Sigrid. What a sweet thing to say!
Agustin Avatar
December 25, 2020 at 2:54 AM
Congrats! Cheering you with blest Christmas spirit, while sharing you "... the gift of God is eternal life through Jesus Christ our Lord" (Romans 6:23 of the King James Bible). God bless you.
Krutsinger Avatar
December 25, 2020 at 11:40 AM
Merry Christmas Beata
Goldsmith Avatar
December 23, 2020 at 12:45 PM
Congratulations on your win. Many times we wait when we should make a move. A wonderful story/write. Enjoy your win with blessings...................
Krutsinger Avatar
December 23, 2020 at 4:36 PM
Thank you so much Paula. I really enjoyed this contest because this photo looked EXACTLY like my oldest daughter, Angela.
Kauffman Avatar
December 23, 2020 at 11:23 AM
So beautiful Caren and so touching. You have reached into the human experience of wishing we had done or said something different. This is so well done and reaches right into my heart with it's poignant lesson. Congratulations on your first place win! Merry Christmas to you and yours!
Krutsinger Avatar
December 23, 2020 at 4:36 PM
Thank you so much my friend. I am so happy about this!
Kauffman Avatar
December 23, 2020 at 11:22 AM
So beautiful Caren and so touching. You have reached into the human experience of wishing we had done or said something different. This is so well done and reaches right into my heart with it's poignant lesson. Congratulations on your first place win! Merry Christmas to you and yours!
Krutsinger Avatar
December 23, 2020 at 4:37 PM
Thank you very much Sam. What a wonderful surprise!
Logan Avatar
December 23, 2020 at 9:07 AM
This is such an emotional write, Caren. Congratulations on your first place win.
Krutsinger Avatar
December 23, 2020 at 4:37 PM
Thank you Jenna. This made me really happy!
Mitra Avatar
December 23, 2020 at 8:38 AM
Congrats on your winning poem Caren....sentiments beautifully described.
Krutsinger Avatar
December 23, 2020 at 4:37 PM
Thank you Carol. I appreciate it.
Roper Avatar
December 23, 2020 at 7:31 AM
Last two lines hit hard, Caren. Wonderful story. I have felt Gods touch a few times in my life and have always to answer his call. I had never had none of them turn me down for a caring hug. Congratulations on your 1st place win. Hugs Eve
Krutsinger Avatar
December 23, 2020 at 4:38 PM
Thank you Eve. I have to say I should listen more than I do.
May Avatar
December 23, 2020 at 6:54 AM
Why to go Caren Great Job!!
Krutsinger Avatar
December 23, 2020 at 4:38 PM
Thank you Bobby. Happy Holidays!
Mcintosh Avatar
December 23, 2020 at 6:00 AM
This is such a blessing and so true... I know I've failed him many times because I didn't listen to that still, small voice. God B L E S S you and CONGRATS on your top win
Krutsinger Avatar
December 23, 2020 at 4:38 PM
Thank you so much Regina. What a great surprise!
Rose  Avatar
December 23, 2020 at 5:39 AM
Dear Caren, I thoroughly enjoyed your entry. So many times we hear that calling but walk on, as humans we don't trust the voice inside at times, thank you for writing this beautiful heart felt story , congratulations on your 1st place win. Love and light, Your Mystic R.
Krutsinger Avatar
December 23, 2020 at 4:39 PM
Thank you so much Mystic Rose Rose. I was really thrilled to see this! I feel very honored my friend. Merry Christmas!
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