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Return 
to the fresh ocean,
without tears of the storm.

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Shadow Hamilton

Date: 11/15/2014 1:37:00 AM

congrats on being featured hugs 5/8/5 syllables for a haiku though

Paul Callus

Date: 10/27/2014 5:03:00 PM

Van Yan...Pan; could be Peter Pan !! :) Timothy Hicks is a clever 20 year old writer; do look him up; he is sincere, friendly and could be helpful, too. Best of luck. // paul

Van Yan
Date: 10/27/2014 5:04:00 PM

Thanks very much!

Paul Callus

Date: 10/27/2014 4:39:00 PM

Hi Van...you could call it free verse; it might also be a kind of modern haiku.

Van Yan
Date: 10/27/2014 4:41:00 PM

OK, thanks! Could you introduce me more youth poets as like me? Van Yan is my pen name and you can call me Peter. Van Yan

Paul Callus

Date: 10/26/2014 6:17:00 AM

Hi Van Yan! This poem might not be a tanka as we know it, but the poem in itself is as fresh as the ocean. Hope you'll enjoy your stay on Soup! // paul

Van Yan
Date: 10/26/2014 7:15:00 PM

So what kind of poem do you think it is? I am a Chinese poet and when I translated it into English I do not know what type it is.

Van Yan
Date: 10/26/2014 9:28:00 AM

Yes, I know. I just want to find a form suitable cuz I translate my poem from Chinese into English.

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 10/26/2014 5:36:00 AM

- Warm welcome to PoetrySoup, Van- I choose your first well written poem - Nice to meet you! - Hope you will be satisfied with our "soup family" - we are many .. but has plenty of room for you too- Be kind and keep PoetrySoup as a haven -(Comment on the poetry of others and they will comment on yours.) Thank you for posted your words and thoughts here, I want to come back to read more another day. - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Van Yan
Date: 10/26/2014 9:30:00 AM

I will. Thanks!