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Needle In the Hay

drops a needle in the huge haystack - - a rat squeals

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Nette Onclaud

Date: 3/13/2012 3:35:00 PM

wow.. this is a visual treat, jack!... a winner all the way... re my contest, you can use the pattern i suggested on my contest page.. i'm confused as well... huggs! :)

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 3/11/2012 9:22:00 PM

Jack... ha ha..perfect target... enjoyed,..pd

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/11/2012 5:17:00 PM

hahahaha. I better see this one on the winners' list. DANG why didn't I think of it. I have got to try this one and just do a limerick or something. LOVE this.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/11/2012 5:17:00 PM

I actually LOL'd when I saw the ending.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 3/11/2012 12:44:00 PM

Enjoyed the creativeness and the humor in this one..I hope that rat wasn't hurt too badly..Thanks for stopping by..The HeeHaw was a Gospel Quarter..They sang on a TV show that we had here in America called HeeHaw..You can look all those up on YouTube..If you type in the title of the songs and on YouTube like Amazing Love on YouTube it should take you to the hymn..If you want to listen to that one by the Hee Haw group type in Boundless Love on YouTube and you should be able to find it..Sara

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 3/11/2012 11:25:00 AM

very visual pice Jack.. good luck in contest luv.. and also with surgery on 30th.. hope Sue can type for u as Ron does for me luv..

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 3/11/2012 8:54:00 AM

Well done haiku Jack - oxox Anne-Lise

Nette Onclaud

Date: 3/11/2012 8:49:00 AM

crisp write that nails the theme on the head, jack.. winning wishes to you!.. enjoyed how you treated the last line:) huggs!