Nature At Fault

Down, creepers for gourds; Up, branches for olives...lo! an olive falls on my nose!


10/10/16
Funny one liner by Silent One
Judged 11/10/16 - Placed 8
Copyright © | Year Posted 2016

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Dietrich Avatar
December 13, 2016 at 8:00 AM
So glad it placed (from your comment below) CONGRATS
U.D Palawon  Avatar
December 14, 2016 at 5:22 AM
Thanks My dear friend...nice preparation for a merry xmas! :)
Balandi Avatar
October 18, 2016 at 3:42 AM
Lovely :). Thanks for your comment on my poem: Lost In WaterXXX
U.D Palawon  Avatar
October 22, 2016 at 11:19 PM
Thanks for the visit. It was a pleasure reading your poem. All the best. :)
May Avatar
October 15, 2016 at 9:30 AM
Congrats on your win Sunita!
U.D Palawon  Avatar
October 22, 2016 at 11:18 PM
Thanks Joseph and all the best! :)
Kimathi Avatar
October 14, 2016 at 4:53 AM
Congrats Sunita, for your WIN in the contest!! ;-)
U.D Palawon  Avatar
October 14, 2016 at 6:23 AM
Thanks Teddy. All the best.:)
Dietrich Avatar
October 13, 2016 at 7:41 PM
Hey, Congratulations, Sunita!!
U.D Palawon  Avatar
October 14, 2016 at 6:22 AM
:D Thanks to you!Best regards S
Balandi Avatar
October 13, 2016 at 5:01 AM
wonderful.
U.D Palawon  Avatar
October 14, 2016 at 6:21 AM
Thanks for the visit. :)
Sewumber Avatar
October 13, 2016 at 5:00 AM
nicely written, very symbolic. Sewumber.
U.D Palawon  Avatar
October 14, 2016 at 6:21 AM
Thanks for the friendly visit. All the best. :)
Dietrich Avatar
October 11, 2016 at 12:53 AM
GREAT ending. I hope you can shorten it up. He wants only one l line. Maybe you could say gourd creepers and olive branches to fit it all on one line!!
U.D Palawon  Avatar
October 12, 2016 at 10:19 AM
Thanks again for your valuable support. This is placed! X]
U.D Palawon  Avatar
October 11, 2016 at 3:37 AM
Thanks for read and suggestion. I tried to work out it again. Hope it sounds better and keep the meaning, as I explained to Victor (comment below). :) Sunita
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