Nasty, Brutish, and Short

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4/28/2025 for Casualty of your Cruelty sponsored by Sara Jama

It was you who initiated this relationship. Even at its outset, I was crying. I was your plaything, the butt of your elaborate practical jokes. Refusing to be transparent, except when teasing me with illusions, you never revealed your true meaning or purpose. You built me up with hope and ideals, only to chop them down and crush me. Everything you gave to me, you took away. I haven't a good word to say, and now, in the end, you're discarding me, like you did all the others. You aren't even attractive, being as you are, nasty, brutish, and short, Good riddance to you, cruel life.

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Gershon Wolf

Date: 5/3/2025 9:47:00 PM

Quite a creative application of 'nasty, brutish and short,' there, David. Kudos, Gershon

Hilda Greenhough

Date: 5/1/2025 11:18:00 AM

The question is "did he convince himself that the relationship is wrong"? This is real to life poetry at its best.

David Crandall
Date: 5/3/2025 10:42:00 AM

Thanks Hilda, that's a good question! Life is funny. To me it seems like when you fly high, it brings you down, but when you're laid low, and brings you back up. Always up and down up and down, so think about the ups!