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February 26, 2024
Placed 1st: This or That, Vol 23 Poetry Contest
Sponsor: Edward Ibeh

Sometimes, in uncertain outcomes, as life agitates, It can sway either way, maneuvering on the edge, For a difference rather modest, makes the final call, When a narrow margin determines a win or a loss. If a win we choose to celebrate, or defeat we deride, Prudent to bear in mind, that it wasn’t a landslide; When results are so close, why not cheer them all, Cognizant to recognize~ distinction is awfully small. Slender is the layer between eve’s dusk and twilight, Between dark of dawn, and luminance of sunrise; Between safe and danger, there lies a narrow divide, Where, between cliff and fall, life’s border resides. Mementos of love embraced, and love sadly repelled, In albums of beloved, or memories forlorn dwell, Clamoring from corridors of good or bad choices made, Between narrow margins of hope, and contours of fate. O, a narrow margin can be of mighty consequence Inhabiting elation of success, or anguish of regrets, When death lingers in the clutches of final moments Stilled between breath inhaled, and breath exhaled.

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Edward Ibeh

Date: 3/4/2024 8:43:00 AM

Heartiest congratulations on your top win in my contest with this excellent poem, Vijay:-) Every line is a gem..."When a narrow margin determines a win or a loss. If a win we choose to celebrate, or defeat we deride" So true!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/2/2024 7:37:00 AM

Congratulations on your win with your profound words. You always are so thoughtful in your writing.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/2/2024 11:19:00 AM

Much appreciate your visit, Andrea--many thanks.

Joe Dimino

Date: 3/2/2024 2:56:00 AM

"Prudent to bear in mind, that it wasn’t a landslide; When results are so close, why not cheer them all, Cognizant to recognize~ distinction is awfully small." Could not have been said better. "Slender is the layer between eve’s dusk and twilight, Between dark of dawn, and luminance of sunrise; Between safe and danger, there lies a narrow divide, Where, between cliff and fall, life’s border resides." Brilliant illustrious poetry! When death lingers in the clutches of final moments Stilled between breath inhaled, and breath exhaled." Ain't that the truth! You get a Fav!

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/2/2024 11:18:00 AM

Always so insightful and inspiring to read your remarks, Joe. Much appreciate you being there and your FAVE. Many thanks, my friend.

Hilo Poet

Date: 3/1/2024 11:58:00 PM

Nicely done, Vijay. Your words were quite generous on the subject matter as being the impetus of Edward's decision. And to that reasoning, my friend, my compliments. Aloha, William

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/2/2024 11:17:00 AM

Thank you my friend. Much appreciate you stopping by, William.

Christuraj Alex

Date: 3/1/2024 7:57:00 PM

"Slender is the layer between eve’s dusk and twilight, Between dark of dawn, and luminance of sunrise" - A very beautifully written poem. Congratulations!

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/2/2024 11:17:00 AM

Much appreciate, Christuraj--many thanks.

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 3/1/2024 8:14:00 AM

Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading your great write. Have a great/blessed day with your win.....................

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/2/2024 11:17:00 AM

Thank you Paula--much appreciate.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 3/1/2024 8:12:00 AM

Creative lines penned. Yes, a narrow line exists with so many happenings of human life. You have expressed it well. Thank you for sharing and for dropping by my page. Sara K

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/2/2024 11:16:00 AM

Thanks again, Sara--much appreciate.

Tom Woody

Date: 3/1/2024 5:53:00 AM

You covered several aspects on the theme, but that last one packs a punch, ie, that narrow margin between life and death. We are fragile creatures, never knowing what might happen. In a flash, a brief moment of fury, and then we are gone. Live well Veej

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/2/2024 11:15:00 AM

Many thanks, Tom--much appreciate.

Evelyn Judy Buehler

Date: 2/29/2024 4:21:00 PM

Many truths are eloquently expressed in your heartfelt, meaningful poem, Vijay. I especially love the beautifully articulated third and final verses. This is a fave. :)

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/2/2024 11:15:00 AM

Many thanks for visiting and commenting, my friend. Much appreciate your presence--and your FAVE. Many thanks, Evelyn.

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 2/29/2024 11:03:00 AM

- Before the important choices in life, we often have great anguish, Vijay ... but even the small, trivial choices can have great significance - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/2/2024 11:14:00 AM

Glad to read your feedback, Anne-Lise. Much appreciate--many thanks.

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 2/28/2024 9:43:00 PM

Life is always a contrast and we have to choose. A fine poetic poem.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/2/2024 11:14:00 AM

Thank you Victor--much appreciate.

Silent One

Date: 2/28/2024 11:35:00 AM

You are right my friend and you described the subject so poetically... Best of luck in the contest..

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/2/2024 11:13:00 AM

Thank you my friend--much appreciate, SO.

Brandy Nicole

Date: 2/27/2024 7:27:00 PM

' Slender is the layer between, ' moments in life, even choices made. Your thoughts hold so much truth, Vijay. With the margin being so narrow, making the right choice can be difficult. Your final thought is tender and emotional, all at the same time. My best to you. Hugs, Brandy

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/2/2024 11:13:00 AM

Always a joy to read your insights. Much appreciate you being there, my friend. Many thanks, Brandy. Hugs to you as well.

Joseph May

Date: 2/27/2024 5:58:00 PM

Within those narrow margins or hopes rise and fall, Very nicely penned Vijay

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/2/2024 11:12:00 AM

Thank you Joseph--much appreciate.

Heidi Sands

Date: 2/27/2024 4:31:00 PM

Wow. I am Faving this one for the insight and truth it relays. Excellent writing. Thought provoking and important. Thank you for sharing your great writing, Vijay :)

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/2/2024 11:11:00 AM

So glad to read that, my friend. Much appreciate your kind remarks and your FAVE. Many thanks, Heidi.

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 2/26/2024 5:20:00 PM

This is such a deep and philosophical poem, Vijay. That fine line between hope/faith, good/bad choices, dark/light requires becoming comfortable living on the edge so to speak. The last two lines were profound and gave me pause. Fabulous contest entry! Best wishes, Sara

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/2/2024 11:11:00 AM

Glad you liked the poem, Sara. Always a joy to read your feedback. Much appreciate--many thanks.

Daniel Henry Rodgers

Date: 2/26/2024 4:36:00 PM

Dear Vijay, Your poem beautifully explores the precarious nature of life and the weight of small choices. The imagery of the "edge" and "slender layer" effectively captures the feeling of being suspended between possibilities. The line "When results are so close, why not cheer them all" offers a refreshing perspective on victory and defeat, reminding us to acknowledge the effort of all involved. The poem delves deeper, highlighting the delicate balance between love and loss, safety and danger, with the "narrow margin" acting as a constant reminder of how close these states can be. The ending lines about the final breath are particularly powerful, emphasizing the ultimate consequence of life's "narrow margin." Vijay this is a thought-provoking and insightful poem! - Blessings, Daniel

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/2/2024 11:10:00 AM

You are always very generous with your feedback, Daniel--thank you for taking the time to write detailed comments. Much appreciate your presence on my page.

Jay Narain

Date: 2/26/2024 10:07:00 AM

In our daily life, we encounter narrow misses amply described by you. Well penned.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/2/2024 11:09:00 AM

Thank you Jay--much appreciate.

Ink Empress

Date: 2/26/2024 9:39:00 AM

What a philosophical and meaningful write this is dear vijay. You write this theme so well too, and makes us readers think deep to your words woven in such eloquence, the depth and flow as well as the cadence of your lines truly is impeccable! Even when you dont specifically rhyme, theres a rhythm to your lines, and i must say i agree with what youv conveyed here.” If a win we choose to celebrate, or defeat we deride, Prudent to bear in mind, that it wasn’t a landslides” so true! FAVE

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/2/2024 11:08:00 AM

So special to hear that from you, my friend. And so very special to receive your FAVE. Much appreciate your presence on my page, Ink. Many thanks.

Tom Cunningham

Date: 2/26/2024 9:34:00 AM

Every day we encounter those narrow margins in our lives, left, right, forward or back, keeping fingers crossed we've made the right choice. Good luck in the contest Vijay. Tom

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/2/2024 11:07:00 AM

Much appreciate, Tom--many thanks.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 2/26/2024 7:37:00 AM

Yes, with each breath we take, we never know if life will continue provided that we think about it especially if we are of the winter's age. Thanks for sharing this one with us and for dropping by my page. Sara K

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/2/2024 11:06:00 AM

Thank you Sara--you are always very kind.

Duke Beaufort

Date: 2/26/2024 7:35:00 AM

Vijay, this makes me reflect on my very own choices and echoes many of my own feelings. This relates to elections as well. Where there are winners, we hope they will consider the other side and not try to crush it. Choices are also sometimes so difficult to make and the consequences are strong. I loved the way you ended this work with the breadth of breath.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/2/2024 11:06:00 AM

Nice to hear that from you, Duke. Much appreciate your visit and comments. Many thanks.

Sotto Poet

Date: 2/26/2024 6:48:00 AM

Your great poem is about the significance of narrow margins in life, where small differences can determine outcomes of great consequence. It revolves around the delicate balance between success and failure, love and loss, life and death, and the recognition of the small distinctions that shape our experiences. With a highly reflective and contemplative, imagery and metaphor to convey the theme. Best wishes for the contest Vijay.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 3/2/2024 11:05:00 AM

Many thanks, my friend. Always a joy when you visit. So appreciate you taking the time to leave detailed remarks.