Narcissus

I think that I shall never see A poem near as nice as me. When I spy my own reflection Sultry suitors face rejection. Such noble brow, bright eyes flash blue My smile so suave, teeth twinkle too. Fine profile, Greek, ideal shot, Six pack of abs, my body’s hot. So long I’ll linger by this pool Though deemed one self-indulgent fool. A thousand years from now, you’ll see, Gardeners still will cherish me! March 1, 2022

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Sam Kauffman

Date: 3/7/2022 10:57:00 AM

Back with congratulations Peter. This is unique and fresh!

Peter Bryce
Date: 3/22/2022 8:04:00 PM

Thanks again, Sam. P.

Janice Canerdy

Date: 3/5/2022 6:21:00 AM

Peter, this is such a descriptive, creative piece. CONGRATS on your win! Janice

Peter Bryce
Date: 3/22/2022 8:04:00 PM

Thank you, Janice. P.

Margarita Lillico

Date: 3/4/2022 5:58:00 PM

Boy, what an ingenious premise, to begin with! And then comes the wit and a crafty pen followed by my ultimate pride to have this “ideal shot” of a poem in my contest! Congrats! M.

Peter Bryce
Date: 3/4/2022 6:03:00 PM

I ECHO your praise ;) Great poetic responses to a titillating topic.

Sam Kauffman

Date: 3/1/2022 2:30:00 PM

What a nice blending of the myth and the lovely, but self centered, narcissus. Love the tongue in cheek! Best wishes for the contest.

Peter Bryce
Date: 3/1/2022 4:14:00 PM

Thanks Sam, lots of grist to be found in the myth mill :)