John Michaels Poet Pantoum

My World Turned Upside Down

As glistening tears down my cheeks trickle,
you whisper beautiful words in my ear.
Precious metal band slips over knuckle,
you're everything in this world I hold dear.

You whisper beautiful words in my ear,
never imagined us here, that's a fact.
You're everything in this world I hold dear,
signatures on paper to seal the pact.

Never imagined us here, that's a fact,
betrayal has replaced love with malaise.
Signatures on paper to seal the pact,
no choice now but to go separate ways.

Betrayal has replaced love with malaise,
precious metal band slips over knuckle.
No choice now but to go separate ways,
as glistening tears down my cheeks trickle.

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(C) 9 July 2017

My first attempt at a Pantoum.

Re-submitted to "Any Poem That Got NA'd in June-July 2017" contest sponsored by Janice Canerdy (judged 2 September 2017).
(3rd Place)

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Susan Ashley November 1, 2017 at 8:53 PM A fantastic and emotional pantoum John. So very well written with your repeat lines and new lines so seemlessly woven. Lovely poetic expression, rhythm and rhyme. Love it!! John Michaels November 4, 2017 at 5:31 AM Thanks so much for your kind comments, Susan. My first Pantoum, so was pleased with the way it turned out. All the best, John.

Heidi Sands July 27, 2017 at 4:16 PM Amazing first Pantoum you have done! Not only did you write this well, but relayed the feelings to the reader too. ! :) John Michaels July 27, 2017 at 4:27 PM Thank you for the wonderful feedback!! Yes, a very personal poem for me and pleased the emotions carried across. Kind regards, John!

Jan Allison July 9, 2017 at 12:52 PM oh wow John you did a fabulous job with this sad poem. It is a challenging form and you nailed it:-) hugs Jan xx John Michaels July 9, 2017 at 1:00 PM Thank you for the kind and supportive words, Jan. It was a really emotional write and the form was especially challenging, but I felt it would be appropriate for the subject. Thanks so much :) John.