Nette Onclaud Poet Haiku

My Water Melody

morning meshes hair 
trees tangle weeds ever near
bubble suds soak sip 
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pillows of water
laundering boxes of joy
bay brims breathing breeze
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give me  bowls brothed
flowing on life’s noodles warm
water…drink my wine!
                        


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(( for RICK ^PARISE's  FLOATING WATER CONTEST))

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James Fraser December 19, 2010 at 10:49 AM Quite a Haiku set Nette, oozing images abound >> James :)

Kabuteng P.Ink K. December 16, 2010 at 11:47 PM lots of wonderful images here, Netter! & I enjoyed your use of alliteration here too-- I hope this won in the contest-- Ako nakapag-puto bumbong na ;)-- yay for that! & sana makumpleto ko and Simbang Gabi ;) Wish me luck! ;) -- enjoy your Christmas, Nette :) --nikko :)

Andrea Dietrich December 15, 2010 at 8:33 PM FLOWING with imagery. Sure to be a winner, Nette!!

Matthew Anish December 15, 2010 at 7:22 PM Liked these haiku! "Pillows of water" reminds me of a Pink Floyd song - I believe it is called a "pillow of winds". Peace & Blessings Matthew Anish

Susan Palli December 15, 2010 at 9:40 AM good one!

Joe Maverick December 15, 2010 at 9:16 AM intresting little set of writes Nette, i have enjoyed this.& seasons greetings.

Suresh Iyer December 15, 2010 at 8:55 AM Loved your poem Thanks for your generous support during the year 2010 Looking forward to 2011 My Best Wishes to you Suresh Iyer, India

Francine Roberts December 15, 2010 at 8:27 AM very interesting set of haikus, different take on the contest, much enjoyed , good luck nette

Linda-Marie Sweetheart December 15, 2010 at 7:33 AM Super descriptive Nette and a sure shot winner for Rick's contest on flowing water.. good luck my friend... luv the alliteration used too..makes it so very flowy ..thankxx for your precious comments on my poetry luv..

Dr.Ram Mehta December 15, 2010 at 5:47 AM Nice melodies of the flowing water with some alliterative phrases

Kash Poet December 15, 2010 at 5:00 AM Absolutely brilliant.Goodluck for the contest-kashinath

Tahera Mannan December 15, 2010 at 4:38 AM A smashing entry for the contest Nette. All the very best.