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My Water Melody

morning meshes hair trees tangle weeds ever near bubble suds soak sip ***---*** pillows of water laundering boxes of joy bay brims breathing breeze ***---*** give me bowls brothed flowing on life’s noodles warm water…drink my wine! ***---***---***---***---***---*** (( for RICK ^PARISE's FLOATING WATER CONTEST))

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James Fraser

Date: 12/19/2010 10:49:00 AM

Quite a Haiku set Nette, oozing images abound >> James :)

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

Date: 12/16/2010 11:47:00 PM

lots of wonderful images here, Netter! & I enjoyed your use of alliteration here too-- I hope this won in the contest-- Ako nakapag-puto bumbong na ;)-- yay for that! & sana makumpleto ko and Simbang Gabi ;) Wish me luck! ;) -- enjoy your Christmas, Nette :) --nikko :)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/15/2010 8:33:00 PM

FLOWING with imagery. Sure to be a winner, Nette!!

Matthew Anish

Date: 12/15/2010 7:22:00 PM

Liked these haiku! "Pillows of water" reminds me of a Pink Floyd song - I believe it is called a "pillow of winds". Peace & Blessings Matthew Anish

Susan Palli

Date: 12/15/2010 9:40:00 AM

good one!

Joe Maverick

Date: 12/15/2010 9:16:00 AM

intresting little set of writes Nette, i have enjoyed this.& seasons greetings.

Suresh Iyer

Date: 12/15/2010 8:55:00 AM

Loved your poem Thanks for your generous support during the year 2010 Looking forward to 2011 My Best Wishes to you Suresh Iyer, India

Francine Roberts

Date: 12/15/2010 8:27:00 AM

very interesting set of haikus, different take on the contest, much enjoyed , good luck nette

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 12/15/2010 7:33:00 AM

Super descriptive Nette and a sure shot winner for Rick's contest on flowing water.. good luck my friend... luv the alliteration used too..makes it so very flowy ..thankxx for your precious comments on my poetry luv..

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 12/15/2010 5:47:00 AM

Nice melodies of the flowing water with some alliterative phrases

Kash Poet

Date: 12/15/2010 5:00:00 AM

Absolutely brilliant.Goodluck for the contest-kashinath

Tahera Mannan

Date: 12/15/2010 4:38:00 AM

A smashing entry for the contest Nette. All the very best.