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My Tragic Sad Childhood

I was adopted as a young child
Throughout my life I’ve been reviled
All my emotions ran so wild
                    My tragic sad childhood


I was breathless when mum called
but at her words I was appalled
and they left me sad and galled
                    My tragic sad childhood


Forsaken by my mother
who chose one over the other -
she preferred to keep my brother!
                    My tragic sad childhood


Separation broke my heart
I was given a fresh start
Destiny kept us far apart
                    My tragic sad childhood


FICTION POEM FOR CONTEST

Rhyme and Refrain Contest
Sponsored By Broken Wings

5/1/18

Copyright © Jan Allison | Year Posted 2018

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Tim Parry Date: 7/11/2018 2:42:00 AM The words paint the picture as the picture paints the words a top notch write Tim Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 7/11/2018 3:49:00 AM Thanks Tim I'm thankful it was just fiction... the contests are a great way of learning new forms and coming away from your comfort zone - i always wrote in rhyme, now I tackle many different forms:-) hugs jan xx

Line Gauthier Date: 6/2/2018 6:22:00 PM An awesome story, Jan. Congrats on your win. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 6/2/2018 6:27:00 PM Thanks Line:-) hugs Jan xx

Charlie Knowlton Date: 5/20/2018 3:31:00 PM Very touching and well written poem Jan. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 5/20/2018 3:37:00 PM Thanks Charlie:-) hugs Jan xx

Christopher Flaherty Date: 5/19/2018 6:00:00 PM She preferred my brother. The heart wants what the giver forgets Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 5/19/2018 6:10:00 PM Thanks Christopher:-) hugs Jan xx

Brian Davey Date: 5/17/2018 11:39:00 PM Tragedy portrayed my friend congrats on your win Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 5/18/2018 2:41:00 AM Thanks Brian:-) hugs jan xx

James Inman Date: 5/15/2018 7:46:00 PM I felt the pain in your write Jan, nicely done. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 5/16/2018 5:38:00 PM Thanks James:-) hugs jan xx

Constance La France Date: 5/15/2018 2:31:00 PM Jan, congratulations on your win in my contest with this excellent penned poem, although fiction you never fail to pull at my heart, and I love your image too, well done ~ Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 5/15/2018 2:34:00 PM You inspire me to write sad i much prefer humour but i love the challenges you set for us with your contests and i am hopefully a better poet for tackling new forms:-) hugs Jan xx

Subimal Sinha-Roy Date: 5/15/2018 6:15:00 AM Congratulations,Jan on your win. Touching fictional poem. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 5/15/2018 10:57:00 AM Thanks Subimal:-) hugs Jan xx

Mick Talbot Date: 5/14/2018 7:03:00 PM I too was glad to see it was in your case only fiction! The realization is it happens, so well written Jan congratulations on your win. hugs Mick Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 5/15/2018 5:01:00 AM Thanks Mick:-) hugs Jan xx

Susan Gentry Date: 5/14/2018 4:03:00 PM Congratulations on your win with this tragic experience so many have. A exceptional portrayal, well written. A fave for me. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 5/15/2018 5:01:00 AM Thanks Susan:-) hugs Jan xx

Gershon Wolf Date: 5/14/2018 3:42:00 PM Congrats on the lemonade, Jan! You've set up your stand and sales are brisk! (See previous comment). :) Gershon Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 5/15/2018 5:00:00 AM Thanks Gershon:-) hugs Jan xx

Pandita Sietesantos Date: 5/14/2018 3:41:00 PM Unfortunately, this heart-wrenching piece is a sad reflection of the tragic reality that many children world-wide are living in today. But I am happy that it is not based on your own personal experience. Congratulations, dear friend on your win! Hugs. Pandita Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 5/15/2018 5:00:00 AM Thanks Pandita:-) hugs jan xx

Curtis Moorman Date: 5/14/2018 2:40:00 PM Oh, my dear friend Jan. I was so glad to see this classified as fiction. My heart was breaking and the tears were flowing for you. I teach a group on Monday nights made up of people who have suffered such tragedies in life as described in your poem. For an old sentimental, emotional guy like me, I was reaching for a kleenex after the first line. Congrats on you win! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 5/15/2018 4:59:00 AM Thanks Curtis, I never in a million years dreamed I would write poetry and surprise myself with fictional poems like this. :-)) hugs jan xx

Artsieladie Sharon Donnelly Date: 5/3/2018 9:21:00 PM I know this is fiction but for too many this is a very sad reality unfortunately. Rejection by either parent, esp. the mother, is very often a pain so deeply rooted, it negatively impacts one in adult life, leaving a person with a jaded outlook. Well spoken, Jan. All the best in the contest! :) hugs ~ Artsie xx Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 5/4/2018 1:37:00 AM Thanks Artise, it is an emotive poem:-( hugs jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen Date: 5/3/2018 1:13:00 PM - A poem that affects many, Jan - Lovely written with a sad theme - Best wishes in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 5/3/2018 2:58:00 PM Thanks Anne Lise:-) hugs Jan xx

James Edward Lee Sr. Date: 5/3/2018 12:52:00 PM Jan, Pure beauty such a lovely verse... From a great poetess...thanks for sharing your creativity.... WRITE ON James-- Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 5/3/2018 2:58:00 PM Thanks James:-) hugs Jan xx

Gershon Wolf Date: 5/2/2018 10:52:00 PM Perfect everything: The theme, the line, the meter, the refrain. This should turn the lemons into lemonade in the contest! :) gw Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 5/3/2018 1:32:00 AM Thanks so much Gershon I wrote another poem for the contest but the rules were unclear about the refrain we should use and it had to be withdrawn from the contest but I re-posted it again as it was a decent poem:-) hugs Jan xx

Matthew Anish Date: 5/2/2018 9:32:00 PM This work has a Dickensinian feel to it. Good luck in the contest. Peace & Love Matthew Anish Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 5/3/2018 1:31:00 AM Thanks so much Matthew:-) hugs Jan xx

Heidi Sands Date: 5/2/2018 6:06:00 PM Well written Jan. You have described it so well and it reaches the reader. Good luck in the contest. I haven't been around for a while, so I haven't commented enough on poems until now. :) Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 5/2/2018 6:08:00 PM Welcome back Heidi:-) hugs Jan xx

John Gondolf Date: 5/2/2018 12:54:00 PM Nicely written, Jan, you made me feel the pain. John Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 5/2/2018 1:03:00 PM Thanks John I prefer to write humour but i know Constance likes sad poems:-) hugs jan xx

Caren Krutsinger Date: 5/2/2018 7:03:00 AM I am so hoping this is fictional, because it makes me want to cry. Very nicely penned, now I'm racing through the comments to see if anyone else has found out if it is true or not. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 5/2/2018 7:04:00 AM Thankfully it is fiction for me Caren - it is noted under the poem :-) hugs jan xx

Ravi Sathasivam Date: 5/2/2018 2:02:00 AM Very heartfelt and sad write. Well penned. Thanks for sharing it. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 5/2/2018 6:57:00 AM Thanks Ravi:-) hugs Jan xx

Carrie Richards Date: 5/1/2018 5:34:00 PM I'm so relieved to know that this was fictional, Jan! A sad story you have told. Well done! (you had me believing!) Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 5/1/2018 5:37:00 PM Thanks for dropping by Carrie, it is an emotive subject and the poem could sadly be true:-( hugs jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong Date: 5/1/2018 4:51:00 PM This has bappened to so many Jan. You expressed the sadness so well. Best of luck in the contest. xxoo ; ) Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 5/1/2018 4:53:00 PM Thanks so much Connie, the first poem I wrote was a happier poem but the contest rules were amended and i withdrew it but did post it as well as this one for the contest:-) so lovely to see you back on soup:-:-) hugs Jan xx

Tom Cunningham Date: 5/1/2018 12:29:00 PM A sad tale Jan, it must really devastating for someone to find out it has happened to them. Good luck. Tom. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 5/1/2018 1:53:00 PM I just sit with a paper tissue as I always find the stories so emotional:-( hugs jan xx Tom Cunningham Date: 5/1/2018 1:49:00 PM I know what you mean Jan, siblings meeting up after a lifetime apart, very emotional experience for them indeed. Tom. Jan Allison Date: 5/1/2018 12:35:00 PM Do you ever watch Long lost families with Davina Mccall - its the type of story they tell:-( hugs jan xx

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