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My Tragic Sad Childhood

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I was adopted as a young child Throughout my life I’ve been reviled All my emotions ran so wild My tragic sad childhood I was breathless when mum called but at her words I was appalled and they left me sad and galled My tragic sad childhood Forsaken by my mother who chose one over the other - she preferred to keep my brother! My tragic sad childhood Separation broke my heart I was given a fresh start Destiny kept us far apart My tragic sad childhood FICTION POEM FOR CONTEST Rhyme and Refrain Contest Sponsored By Broken Wings 5/1/18

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Tim Parry

Date: 7/11/2018 2:42:00 AM

The words paint the picture as the picture paints the words a top notch write Tim

Jan Allison
Date: 7/11/2018 3:49:00 AM

Thanks Tim I'm thankful it was just fiction... the contests are a great way of learning new forms and coming away from your comfort zone - i always wrote in rhyme, now I tackle many different forms:-) hugs jan xx

Line Gauthier

Date: 6/2/2018 6:22:00 PM

An awesome story, Jan. Congrats on your win.

Jan Allison
Date: 6/2/2018 6:27:00 PM

Thanks Line:-) hugs Jan xx

Charlie Knowlton

Date: 5/20/2018 3:31:00 PM

Very touching and well written poem Jan.

Jan Allison
Date: 5/20/2018 3:37:00 PM

Thanks Charlie:-) hugs Jan xx

Christopher Flaherty

Date: 5/19/2018 6:00:00 PM

She preferred my brother. The heart wants what the giver forgets

Jan Allison
Date: 5/19/2018 6:10:00 PM

Thanks Christopher:-) hugs Jan xx

Brian Davey

Date: 5/17/2018 11:39:00 PM

Tragedy portrayed my friend congrats on your win

Jan Allison
Date: 5/18/2018 2:41:00 AM

Thanks Brian:-) hugs jan xx

James Inman

Date: 5/15/2018 7:46:00 PM

I felt the pain in your write Jan, nicely done.

Jan Allison
Date: 5/16/2018 5:38:00 PM

Thanks James:-) hugs jan xx

Constance La France

Date: 5/15/2018 2:31:00 PM

Jan, congratulations on your win in my contest with this excellent penned poem, although fiction you never fail to pull at my heart, and I love your image too, well done ~

Jan Allison
Date: 5/15/2018 2:34:00 PM

You inspire me to write sad i much prefer humour but i love the challenges you set for us with your contests and i am hopefully a better poet for tackling new forms:-) hugs Jan xx

Subimal Sinha-Roy

Date: 5/15/2018 6:15:00 AM

Congratulations,Jan on your win. Touching fictional poem.

Jan Allison
Date: 5/15/2018 10:57:00 AM

Thanks Subimal:-) hugs Jan xx

Mick Talbot

Date: 5/14/2018 7:03:00 PM

I too was glad to see it was in your case only fiction! The realization is it happens, so well written Jan congratulations on your win. hugs Mick

Jan Allison
Date: 5/15/2018 5:01:00 AM

Thanks Mick:-) hugs Jan xx

Susan Gentry

Date: 5/14/2018 4:03:00 PM

Congratulations on your win with this tragic experience so many have. A exceptional portrayal, well written. A fave for me.

Jan Allison
Date: 5/15/2018 5:01:00 AM

Thanks Susan:-) hugs Jan xx

Gershon Wolf

Date: 5/14/2018 3:42:00 PM

Congrats on the lemonade, Jan! You've set up your stand and sales are brisk! (See previous comment). :) Gershon

Jan Allison
Date: 5/15/2018 5:00:00 AM

Thanks Gershon:-) hugs Jan xx

Pandita Sietesantos

Date: 5/14/2018 3:41:00 PM

Unfortunately, this heart-wrenching piece is a sad reflection of the tragic reality that many children world-wide are living in today. But I am happy that it is not based on your own personal experience. Congratulations, dear friend on your win! Hugs. Pandita

Jan Allison
Date: 5/15/2018 5:00:00 AM

Thanks Pandita:-) hugs jan xx

Curtis Moorman

Date: 5/14/2018 2:40:00 PM

Oh, my dear friend Jan. I was so glad to see this classified as fiction. My heart was breaking and the tears were flowing for you. I teach a group on Monday nights made up of people who have suffered such tragedies in life as described in your poem. For an old sentimental, emotional guy like me, I was reaching for a kleenex after the first line. Congrats on you win!

Jan Allison
Date: 5/15/2018 4:59:00 AM

Thanks Curtis, I never in a million years dreamed I would write poetry and surprise myself with fictional poems like this. :-)) hugs jan xx

Artsieladie Sharon Donnelly

Date: 5/3/2018 9:21:00 PM

I know this is fiction but for too many this is a very sad reality unfortunately. Rejection by either parent, esp. the mother, is very often a pain so deeply rooted, it negatively impacts one in adult life, leaving a person with a jaded outlook. Well spoken, Jan. All the best in the contest! :) hugs ~ Artsie xx

Jan Allison
Date: 5/4/2018 1:37:00 AM

Thanks Artise, it is an emotive poem:-( hugs jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 5/3/2018 1:13:00 PM

- A poem that affects many, Jan - Lovely written with a sad theme - Best wishes in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Jan Allison
Date: 5/3/2018 2:58:00 PM

Thanks Anne Lise:-) hugs Jan xx

James Edward Lee Sr.

Date: 5/3/2018 12:52:00 PM

Jan, Pure beauty such a lovely verse... From a great poetess...thanks for sharing your creativity.... WRITE ON James--

Jan Allison
Date: 5/3/2018 2:58:00 PM

Thanks James:-) hugs Jan xx

Gershon Wolf

Date: 5/2/2018 10:52:00 PM

Perfect everything: The theme, the line, the meter, the refrain. This should turn the lemons into lemonade in the contest! :) gw

Jan Allison
Date: 5/3/2018 1:32:00 AM

Thanks so much Gershon I wrote another poem for the contest but the rules were unclear about the refrain we should use and it had to be withdrawn from the contest but I re-posted it again as it was a decent poem:-) hugs Jan xx

Matthew Anish

Date: 5/2/2018 9:32:00 PM

This work has a Dickensinian feel to it. Good luck in the contest. Peace & Love Matthew Anish

Jan Allison
Date: 5/3/2018 1:31:00 AM

Thanks so much Matthew:-) hugs Jan xx

Heidi Sands

Date: 5/2/2018 6:06:00 PM

Well written Jan. You have described it so well and it reaches the reader. Good luck in the contest. I haven't been around for a while, so I haven't commented enough on poems until now. :)

Jan Allison
Date: 5/2/2018 6:08:00 PM

Welcome back Heidi:-) hugs Jan xx

John Gondolf

Date: 5/2/2018 12:54:00 PM

Nicely written, Jan, you made me feel the pain. John

Jan Allison
Date: 5/2/2018 1:03:00 PM

Thanks John I prefer to write humour but i know Constance likes sad poems:-) hugs jan xx

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 5/2/2018 7:03:00 AM

I am so hoping this is fictional, because it makes me want to cry. Very nicely penned, now I'm racing through the comments to see if anyone else has found out if it is true or not.

Jan Allison
Date: 5/2/2018 7:04:00 AM

Thankfully it is fiction for me Caren - it is noted under the poem :-) hugs jan xx

Ravi Sathasivam

Date: 5/2/2018 2:02:00 AM

Very heartfelt and sad write. Well penned. Thanks for sharing it.

Jan Allison
Date: 5/2/2018 6:57:00 AM

Thanks Ravi:-) hugs Jan xx

Carrie Richards

Date: 5/1/2018 5:34:00 PM

I'm so relieved to know that this was fictional, Jan! A sad story you have told. Well done! (you had me believing!)

Jan Allison
Date: 5/1/2018 5:37:00 PM

Thanks for dropping by Carrie, it is an emotive subject and the poem could sadly be true:-( hugs jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 5/1/2018 4:51:00 PM

This has bappened to so many Jan. You expressed the sadness so well. Best of luck in the contest. xxoo ; )

Jan Allison
Date: 5/1/2018 4:53:00 PM

Thanks so much Connie, the first poem I wrote was a happier poem but the contest rules were amended and i withdrew it but did post it as well as this one for the contest:-) so lovely to see you back on soup:-:-) hugs Jan xx

Niall Fulham

Date: 5/1/2018 3:24:00 PM

Hi Jan, emotional sad write well penned :) good luck in contest my friend::)))Hugs~~~Niall

Jan Allison
Date: 5/1/2018 3:32:00 PM

Thanks Niall:-) hugs jan xx