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My Tragic Sad Childhood

I was adopted as a young child
Throughout my life I’ve been reviled
All my emotions ran so wild
                    My tragic sad childhood


I was breathless when mum called
but at her words I was appalled
and they left me sad and galled
                    My tragic sad childhood


Forsaken by my mother
who chose one over the other -
she preferred to keep my brother!
                    My tragic sad childhood


Separation broke my heart
I was given a fresh start
Destiny kept us far apart
                    My tragic sad childhood


FICTION POEM FOR CONTEST

Rhyme and Refrain Contest
Sponsored By Broken Wings

5/1/18

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Tim Parry July 11, 2018 at 2:42 AM The words paint the picture as the picture paints the words a top notch write Tim Jan Allison July 11, 2018 at 3:49 AM Thanks Tim I'm thankful it was just fiction... the contests are a great way of learning new forms and coming away from your comfort zone - i always wrote in rhyme, now I tackle many different forms:-) hugs jan xx

Line Gauthier June 2, 2018 at 6:22 PM An awesome story, Jan. Congrats on your win. Jan Allison June 2, 2018 at 6:27 PM Thanks Line:-) hugs Jan xx

Charlie Knowlton May 20, 2018 at 3:31 PM Very touching and well written poem Jan. Jan Allison May 20, 2018 at 3:37 PM Thanks Charlie:-) hugs Jan xx

Christopher Flaherty May 19, 2018 at 6:00 PM She preferred my brother. The heart wants what the giver forgets Jan Allison May 19, 2018 at 6:10 PM Thanks Christopher:-) hugs Jan xx

Brian Davey May 17, 2018 at 11:39 PM Tragedy portrayed my friend congrats on your win Jan Allison May 18, 2018 at 2:41 AM Thanks Brian:-) hugs jan xx

James Inman May 15, 2018 at 7:46 PM I felt the pain in your write Jan, nicely done. Jan Allison May 16, 2018 at 5:38 PM Thanks James:-) hugs jan xx

Constance La France May 15, 2018 at 2:31 PM Jan, congratulations on your win in my contest with this excellent penned poem, although fiction you never fail to pull at my heart, and I love your image too, well done ~ Jan Allison May 15, 2018 at 2:34 PM You inspire me to write sad i much prefer humour but i love the challenges you set for us with your contests and i am hopefully a better poet for tackling new forms:-) hugs Jan xx

Subimal Sinha-Roy May 15, 2018 at 6:15 AM Congratulations,Jan on your win. Touching fictional poem. Jan Allison May 15, 2018 at 10:57 AM Thanks Subimal:-) hugs Jan xx

Mick Talbot May 14, 2018 at 7:03 PM I too was glad to see it was in your case only fiction! The realization is it happens, so well written Jan congratulations on your win. hugs Mick Jan Allison May 15, 2018 at 5:01 AM Thanks Mick:-) hugs Jan xx

Susan Gentry May 14, 2018 at 4:03 PM Congratulations on your win with this tragic experience so many have. A exceptional portrayal, well written. A fave for me. Jan Allison May 15, 2018 at 5:01 AM Thanks Susan:-) hugs Jan xx

Gershon Wolf May 14, 2018 at 3:42 PM Congrats on the lemonade, Jan! You've set up your stand and sales are brisk! (See previous comment). :) Gershon Jan Allison May 15, 2018 at 5:00 AM Thanks Gershon:-) hugs Jan xx

Pandita Sietesantos May 14, 2018 at 3:41 PM Unfortunately, this heart-wrenching piece is a sad reflection of the tragic reality that many children world-wide are living in today. But I am happy that it is not based on your own personal experience. Congratulations, dear friend on your win! Hugs. Pandita Jan Allison May 15, 2018 at 5:00 AM Thanks Pandita:-) hugs jan xx

Curtis Moorman May 14, 2018 at 2:40 PM Oh, my dear friend Jan. I was so glad to see this classified as fiction. My heart was breaking and the tears were flowing for you. I teach a group on Monday nights made up of people who have suffered such tragedies in life as described in your poem. For an old sentimental, emotional guy like me, I was reaching for a kleenex after the first line. Congrats on you win! Jan Allison May 15, 2018 at 4:59 AM Thanks Curtis, I never in a million years dreamed I would write poetry and surprise myself with fictional poems like this. :-)) hugs jan xx

Artsieladie Sharon Donnelly May 3, 2018 at 9:21 PM I know this is fiction but for too many this is a very sad reality unfortunately. Rejection by either parent, esp. the mother, is very often a pain so deeply rooted, it negatively impacts one in adult life, leaving a person with a jaded outlook. Well spoken, Jan. All the best in the contest! :) hugs ~ Artsie xx Jan Allison May 4, 2018 at 1:37 AM Thanks Artise, it is an emotive poem:-( hugs jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen May 3, 2018 at 1:13 PM - A poem that affects many, Jan - Lovely written with a sad theme - Best wishes in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Jan Allison May 3, 2018 at 2:58 PM Thanks Anne Lise:-) hugs Jan xx

James Edward Lee Sr. May 3, 2018 at 12:52 PM Jan, Pure beauty such a lovely verse... From a great poetess...thanks for sharing your creativity.... WRITE ON James-- Jan Allison May 3, 2018 at 2:58 PM Thanks James:-) hugs Jan xx

Gershon Wolf May 2, 2018 at 10:52 PM Perfect everything: The theme, the line, the meter, the refrain. This should turn the lemons into lemonade in the contest! :) gw Jan Allison May 3, 2018 at 1:32 AM Thanks so much Gershon I wrote another poem for the contest but the rules were unclear about the refrain we should use and it had to be withdrawn from the contest but I re-posted it again as it was a decent poem:-) hugs Jan xx

Matthew Anish May 2, 2018 at 9:32 PM This work has a Dickensinian feel to it. Good luck in the contest. Peace & Love Matthew Anish Jan Allison May 3, 2018 at 1:31 AM Thanks so much Matthew:-) hugs Jan xx

Heidi Sands May 2, 2018 at 6:06 PM Well written Jan. You have described it so well and it reaches the reader. Good luck in the contest. I haven't been around for a while, so I haven't commented enough on poems until now. :) Jan Allison May 2, 2018 at 6:08 PM Welcome back Heidi:-) hugs Jan xx

John Gondolf May 2, 2018 at 12:54 PM Nicely written, Jan, you made me feel the pain. John Jan Allison May 2, 2018 at 1:03 PM Thanks John I prefer to write humour but i know Constance likes sad poems:-) hugs jan xx

Caren Krutsinger May 2, 2018 at 7:03 AM I am so hoping this is fictional, because it makes me want to cry. Very nicely penned, now I'm racing through the comments to see if anyone else has found out if it is true or not. Jan Allison May 2, 2018 at 7:04 AM Thankfully it is fiction for me Caren - it is noted under the poem :-) hugs jan xx

Ravi Sathasivam May 2, 2018 at 2:02 AM Very heartfelt and sad write. Well penned. Thanks for sharing it. Jan Allison May 2, 2018 at 6:57 AM Thanks Ravi:-) hugs Jan xx

Carrie Richards May 1, 2018 at 5:34 PM I'm so relieved to know that this was fictional, Jan! A sad story you have told. Well done! (you had me believing!) Jan Allison May 1, 2018 at 5:37 PM Thanks for dropping by Carrie, it is an emotive subject and the poem could sadly be true:-( hugs jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong May 1, 2018 at 4:51 PM This has bappened to so many Jan. You expressed the sadness so well. Best of luck in the contest. xxoo ; ) Jan Allison May 1, 2018 at 4:53 PM Thanks so much Connie, the first poem I wrote was a happier poem but the contest rules were amended and i withdrew it but did post it as well as this one for the contest:-) so lovely to see you back on soup:-:-) hugs Jan xx

Tom Cunningham May 1, 2018 at 12:29 PM A sad tale Jan, it must really devastating for someone to find out it has happened to them. Good luck. Tom. Jan Allison May 1, 2018 at 1:53 PM I just sit with a paper tissue as I always find the stories so emotional:-( hugs jan xx Tom Cunningham May 1, 2018 at 1:49 PM I know what you mean Jan, siblings meeting up after a lifetime apart, very emotional experience for them indeed. Tom. Jan Allison May 1, 2018 at 12:35 PM Do you ever watch Long lost families with Davina Mccall - its the type of story they tell:-( hugs jan xx

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