My Thoughts

as i sit and wonder
i ponder
on my life yonder 
thats what daddy say
on a warm day
in the hay 
while the people play
i  think of you
Copyright © | Year Posted 2009

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June 16, 2016 at 9:02 AM
Ashley,, nicely penned. Enjoyed reading your thoughts and words today. **SKAT**
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May 26, 2009 at 4:35 PM
Simple yet impressive! - jeremia
Fraser Avatar
May 26, 2009 at 10:59 AM
Nice write Ashley, James
Brown Avatar
May 26, 2009 at 7:12 AM
Welcome to PoetrySoup Ashley. I am hoping to read many more poems written by you. Love, Carol
Parker Avatar
May 26, 2009 at 6:22 AM
These are nice, simple expressions of everyday life, but try and add a few words to more fully express your thoughts. EXAMPLE: As I sit and wonder/ My mind will often ponder/ about the world out yonder/ but turning homeward grows fonder/ On a warm day in May/ Dad works hard to bail hay/ Kids in the yard freely play/ But only you can my mind sway. You have the stanza-ending words to build good rhyme schemes. Just more fully develop your thoughts and put them on paper.
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May 26, 2009 at 6:04 AM
Lovely thoughts that shows a heart..thanks for sharing.
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