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My Pacifier

When I can't sleep
When am down 
When I grow white hair waiting 
When I want to dream
When am worried
When I want to feel good 
When I want to hide
When I want to be left alone
When I want to connect 
When i have no choice
When, i can choose

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Richard Lamoureux

March 24, 2015 at 8:37 AM

I have written a couple and this was the first to be published. The physical book is in second printing but only available in Canada. I would be thrilled to hear your thoughts after reading it. Thanks for looking it up.

Njeri Hunjeri

March 24, 2015 at 8:52 AM

Am planning to read it and will definitely tell you my thoughts on it. Am excited!!!

Richard Lamoureux

March 24, 2015 at 8:26 AM

I make errors all the time as well. If you ever read my book "DUMMY Hurtful and Healing Words" you will understand. I have trouble with certain words and make the same errors over and over again.

Njeri Hunjeri

March 24, 2015 at 8:33 AM

I googled it and I saw it! Your book maybe the 1st book I buy on kindle. I'd def love to read it. Congrats. Is this your 1st? Okay I can google that too. Everything is on Google:-)

Njeri Hunjeri

March 24, 2015 at 8:29 AM

Omg! You have a book! I have to Google that now. That's awesome Rick.

Richard Lamoureux

March 24, 2015 at 6:14 AM

It seems you are missing a couple of "I"s Line two and five, consider changing to "When I am down" and "When I am worried" the missing "I"s mess with your flow. I am also curious why you switched to a small i in the last two lines.

Njeri Hunjeri

March 24, 2015 at 8:22 AM

To be honest this is another of my grammar 'issue'. Like in my head I read it and it feels correct and even when I verbally read it, it feels right. Thank you Rick for pointing that out. Next time when I have this kind of flow, I'll def be more careful. But again the title is Pacifier and so am a little baby. And babies make errors all the time:-)

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