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My New Sneakers

My new sneakers were pure white, And the laces were pink neon, On the inside it was airy, But on the outside they were strong, I wore my sneakers everywhere, To school and to the park, And then I noticed something, My sneakers were getting dark! So I'm back to my old sneakers' With cement on one side, The laces were loose, One time I tripped and almost died! I think I should go barefoot instead of the ones that I worn out, If that does not happen... I think I'll wear a pout! Chayil Hyland 2/16/2014

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Date: 5/9/2014 8:25:00 PM
Hi Chayil . I love your nice poem. It told a lot and you kept it short and simple and it is what i love. warm hugs from your classmate Ameesha S.
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Date: 2/28/2014 5:18:00 AM
Nicely written Chayil and welcome to PoetrySoup... Verlena
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Date: 2/17/2014 3:44:00 AM
- Warm welcome to PoetrySoup,Chayil- I choose your first nice written poem - hope you will write many poem in the future- Hope you will be satisfied with our "soup family" - we are many .. but has plenty of room for you too- PoetrySoup Rule1: Be kind and keep PoetrySoup a haven. PoetrySoup is a drama free zone(Comment on the poetry of others and they will comment on yours.) Thank you posted your words and thoughts here, I want to come back to read more another day. - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 2/17/2014 2:35:00 AM
Chayil, , Stopping by with a nice, sweet Welcome to Poetry Soup. I will find much delight, in reading and in time become familiar with your way of writing. But, for the mean time, I will greet you with the same smile, other poets passed when I first join the soup 4 years ago. I wish you the best when it comes to your poems. I hope you get to meet all the nice poets around here. Starting with me. SKAT :-) Please drop a hello and tell me a little about yourself if you like. I would like to be your newest poetry soup "FRIEND". Hugs* SKAT
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Date: 2/16/2014 7:52:00 PM
excellent poem, i will try to avoid white sneakers in future. Happy reading and writing. Jan x
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Date: 2/16/2014 5:26:00 PM
Yo chayil, your work isn't better than mine- but good job. From your brother samuel hyland
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Ameesha Santanoo
Date: 5/9/2014 8:26:00 PM
SAMUEL IT IS Ameesha S. what are you doing on chayils account
Date: 2/16/2014 4:05:00 PM
Hi Chayil, i don't know about you, but I love my sneakers, over my new ones any day. Witty and fun poem... A dangerous fall you took. , A nice warm WELCOME to poetry soup. You will enjoy the community, we are one big happy family. (Drama & Love. LOL) ~ Take Care!! From: your new poet friend @-> LINDA <-@
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Chayil Hyland
Date: 2/22/2014 11:06:00 AM
Thank you very much!!!:)

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