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My Mother Star

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Clouds descended at the pinch of midnight sketching a faded portrait that I saw form; my arms perched high to the blood- red sky and the woman that bore me appeared above. I searched for her like a lifetime ; gathering records through ream of files : we connected thrice, her twilight dying, that in a monotone, I still ask why she gave me away in deep reflection. My mother held me, her almond eyes lonely, yet her voice clear in forgiveness , granting our nights with bits of sentiment. How I missed that chance of popsicle rides or childhood doodles…quite late for us to mark breakthrough undone, where dreams could have been fondled in a nourishing way. Every now and then, come late evening when I see my real mother, a lone lady star, this heart bleeds at the thought that I never knew her enough …and like an abandoned waif, I cry, asking heaven that one day, when my time arrives let there be two bright stars playing on coastlines, under rooftops, in the sky. .................. Contest of Silent One, Long Lost Family 8.18.2016

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Date: 9/7/2016 8:07:00 AM
Congrats Nette, for your well, deserved top placement with this piece!! ;-)
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Date: 9/3/2016 1:33:00 PM
This is so emotional and beautiful Nette!Congrats!
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Date: 9/2/2016 11:18:00 PM
Touching and I like the picture with it. Congrats on your win! Sunita
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Date: 9/2/2016 8:28:00 PM
Beautiful and touching, Nette. Congratulations.
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Date: 9/2/2016 8:22:00 PM
Even your beautiful title, makes my heart feel the love and loss. Beautiful work as always, Nette. :)
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Date: 9/2/2016 8:01:00 PM
Nette, very well written lovely lady, remarkably great...congrats on your placement :)-luloo
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Date: 8/18/2016 11:59:00 AM
Wonderful write Nette, loved the last four lines...
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Date: 8/17/2016 1:55:00 PM
- One heartbreaking beautiful poem, Nette - Deep feelings - Good luck in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 8/17/2016 1:45:00 PM
Beautifully written, Nette, So very sad but also a refreshing twinge of hope at the end. Good luck in contest.
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Date: 8/17/2016 11:56:00 AM
So breathe taking, Nette, "How I missed that chance of popsicle rides or childhood doodles…quite late for us, let there be two bright stars playing " so beautiful. a 10.... Hugs Eve and good luck in the contest
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