My Meltdown

I don't know why you don't notice me
Everytime we talk, you don't notice my true intensions
I want you to be mine and only mine

One day, we walk from school and we talk about the little things,
Eventually, we are alone I decide to tell you everything I want
You just look at me; with disgust, hatred, and pity
With that you take off and leave me alone

I yelled and screamed at myself, telling myself I am truly disgusting
I look right beside me seeing a knife
Is this what you want, you want me to suffer pain, really?

I take it and put it in my hands..
My final words....
"Even in the end, I would die for you..."
And with that everything turned black...
Copyright © | Year Posted 2013


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Date: 7/12/2013 11:16:00 PM
I like your poem Ritsu-Dropping in with a nice warm WELCOME to poetry soup. I’m here to invite you on over to my contest. You will find the contest page on the top left hand side* -If you ever need or seek feedback on a certain poem, click on my name any time you like. I’m looking forward in following and reading your poetry. Hope to hear from you soon. You will enjoy the community, we are one big happy family. (Drama & Love. LOL) ~ Take Care!! From: your new poet friend @-> LINDA <-@"
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Date: 7/12/2013 4:48:00 PM
Ritsu , your first poem on the soup is excellent for the readers, Stopping by with a nice and sweet Welcome to Poetry Soup. Wishing you the best when it comes to your poems. I hope you get to meet all the nice poets around here. Starting with me. SKAT :-) Please drop a hello and tell me a little about yourself if you like. I would like to be your newest poetry soup fan and "FRIEND"....... God Bless........... Hugs* SKAT"
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Ritsu Namine
Date: 7/12/2013 5:16:00 PM
Thank you sooo much. :D
Date: 7/12/2013 6:57:00 AM
- Hi Ritsu, a well written poem. - Welcome to P-Soup. - Thanks for your first poem, hope there will be many more in the future. - Have fun with poetry. - Good luck! - Greetings from Norway / / Anne-Lise :)
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Ritsu Namine
Date: 7/12/2013 5:15:00 PM
Thank you. :D
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