Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen Poet Ghazal

My Love For You Remained

My Love for You Remained

What torment is there greater than love so feigned?
For despite great pain, my love for you remained.

Thy passions, ignoring dreams, lust sought and claimed.
Crying, all the while, my love for you remained.

Dry promises, from your lips, enslaved my brain.
My heart clung to hope; my love for you remained.

Although thoughts void of hope endured great pain.
As joys slipped away, my love for you remained.

Secret lovers revealed that our love lie stained.
Contrived excuses, my love for you remained.

Friends told me that believing you was inane.
But without complaint, my love for you remained.

Lust, like a lion flaunting his mane… ingrained.
Wishes not yet won, my love for you remained.

Mockery, criticism and anger reigned.
Desertion came; and my love for you remained.

Adoration ended as my heart maintained.  
Defeat proclaimed.  But my love for you remained.



© Name withheld for the Contest
January 29, 2010

Poetic form: Ghazal

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Pashang Salehi February 8, 2016 at 5:38 PM Hi Dane Ann I just saw this poem of yours. Nicely done. It is a beautiful poem. I want to make a comment regarding "the form" that you've chosen for this piece. " Ghazal". Poetry soup has a good definition and example about ghazal. The first line “a couplet” must end up with a rhyme , sometime followed with refrain. The subsequent couplets pick up the same type of rhyme but only on the second part. The refrain in Ghazal is not mandatory. please check the example on the soup. Pashang Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen December 23, 2016 at 5:33 PM Better late than never...I just saw your most welcome comment. I have been so busy with real world life...raising 4 grandchildren during my senior years. I looked over the form. Thank you for pointing out that I did not have to use the same rhyme all the way through the poem. Whew! I'll try it again, sometime.

Gert W. Knop June 1, 2010 at 5:49 AM Congrats, Dane Ann for making it into the first round with your two poems! Well written and have a great week...Gert

Linda-Marie Sweetheart May 31, 2010 at 10:25 AM Congrats on both your poems making it to the first round of competition in Poetry Soup contest.. good luck.. luv.. Linda-Marie.

Brian Strand May 31, 2010 at 8:26 AM Empassioned words Dane in this worthy Ist round winner.Rgds Brian

April 16, 2010 at 6:30 PM Interesting perspective on love. Nice use of rhyme. Congratulations on having your poem featured. Keep up the good writing! Karen

Vince Suzadail Jr. April 13, 2010 at 6:32 PM Congrats Dane Ann on your poetry being featured this week. Vince

Margaret Foster April 12, 2010 at 5:31 PM congratulations Dane. this featured work is quite outstanding. Such a difficult form to write. well done as ever...Margaret

Janette Fisher April 12, 2010 at 12:09 PM Many congrats on your featured piece this week. Rgds Janette

Ernilando Tugaff April 12, 2010 at 11:57 AM Dane congratulations on your featured poem this week. You did it again my frend. Wish you more success. Ernilando

Carol Sunshine Brown April 12, 2010 at 11:01 AM Congratulations on your poetry being featured this week Dane Ann. May you have many more features. Love, Carol

Linda-Marie Sweetheart April 12, 2010 at 5:19 AM Congrats Dane Ann on your featured poem this week on the Soup... an excellent write to feture and share...luv.. Linda-Marie..

Linda-Marie Sweetheart January 29, 2010 at 8:01 PM Wonderful... just wonderful... my friend... great news.. I AM BACK.. to enjoy yours and others writes as I hope u will return to read mine... luv.. Linda-Marie..

Carolyn Devonshire January 29, 2010 at 6:50 PM Very interesting verse form, Dane Ann. And I certainly have always admired the way you stand by your man. You have such a true and precious heart. Much love and admiration, Carolyn

Audrey Haick January 29, 2010 at 6:43 PM You are an amazing woman, Dane Ann. He was a lucky man to have you in his life and to love him so. Goes to my favs. Peace and love, Audrey

Scarlett Sepulvado Anderson January 29, 2010 at 6:10 PM What a powerful piece. I love the way you were able to still have lasting love through all the pain. Forgiveness is just as much for us. I really like this. Have a nice day Scarlett

Sara Kendrick January 29, 2010 at 5:01 PM Your love was true and had staying power whether the other person measured up or not. Interesting presentation of love lost or betrayal. Keep the creative pen flowing. Sara

Charmaine Chircop January 29, 2010 at 1:42 PM Dane im feeling you in pain and it makes me so sad, Hard is life when we love and get hurt by those we love most,yet i know your spirit, you will feel the sun again, I promise..Charma:)