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My Love For You Remained

My Love for You Remained What torment is there greater than love so feigned? For despite great pain, my love for you remained. Thy passions, ignoring dreams, lust sought and claimed. Crying, all the while, my love for you remained. Dry promises, from your lips, enslaved my brain. My heart clung to hope; my love for you remained. Although thoughts void of hope endured great pain. As joys slipped away, my love for you remained. Secret lovers revealed that our love lie stained. Contrived excuses, my love for you remained. Friends told me that believing you was inane. But without complaint, my love for you remained. Lust, like a lion flaunting his mane… ingrained. Wishes not yet won, my love for you remained. Mockery, criticism and anger reigned. Desertion came; and my love for you remained. Adoration ended as my heart maintained. Defeat proclaimed. But my love for you remained. © Name withheld for the Contest January 29, 2010 Poetic form: Ghazal

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Pashang Salehi

Date: 2/8/2016 5:38:00 PM

Hi Dane Ann I just saw this poem of yours. Nicely done. It is a beautiful poem. I want to make a comment regarding "the form" that you've chosen for this piece. " Ghazal". Poetry soup has a good definition and example about ghazal. The first line “a couplet” must end up with a rhyme , sometime followed with refrain. The subsequent couplets pick up the same type of rhyme but only on the second part. The refrain in Ghazal is not mandatory. please check the example on the soup. Pashang

Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen
Date: 12/23/2016 5:33:00 PM

Better late than never...I just saw your most welcome comment. I have been so busy with real world life...raising 4 grandchildren during my senior years. I looked over the form. Thank you for pointing out that I did not have to use the same rhyme all the way through the poem. Whew! I'll try it again, sometime.

Gert W. Knop

Date: 6/1/2010 5:49:00 AM

Congrats, Dane Ann for making it into the first round with your two poems! Well written and have a great week...Gert

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 5/31/2010 10:25:00 AM

Congrats on both your poems making it to the first round of competition in Poetry Soup contest.. good luck.. luv.. Linda-Marie.

Brian Strand

Date: 5/31/2010 8:26:00 AM

Empassioned words Dane in this worthy Ist round winner.Rgds Brian

Date: 4/16/2010 6:30:00 PM

Interesting perspective on love. Nice use of rhyme. Congratulations on having your poem featured. Keep up the good writing! Karen

Vince Suzadail Jr.

Date: 4/13/2010 6:32:00 PM

Congrats Dane Ann on your poetry being featured this week. Vince

Margaret Foster

Date: 4/12/2010 5:31:00 PM

congratulations Dane. this featured work is quite outstanding. Such a difficult form to write. well done as ever...Margaret

Janette Fisher

Date: 4/12/2010 12:09:00 PM

Many congrats on your featured piece this week. Rgds Janette

Ernilando Tugaff

Date: 4/12/2010 11:57:00 AM

Dane congratulations on your featured poem this week. You did it again my frend. Wish you more success. Ernilando

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 4/12/2010 11:01:00 AM

Congratulations on your poetry being featured this week Dane Ann. May you have many more features. Love, Carol

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 4/12/2010 5:19:00 AM

Congrats Dane Ann on your featured poem this week on the Soup... an excellent write to feture and share...luv.. Linda-Marie..

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 1/29/2010 8:01:00 PM

Wonderful... just wonderful... my friend... great news.. I AM BACK.. to enjoy yours and others writes as I hope u will return to read mine... luv.. Linda-Marie..

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 1/29/2010 6:50:00 PM

Very interesting verse form, Dane Ann. And I certainly have always admired the way you stand by your man. You have such a true and precious heart. Much love and admiration, Carolyn

Audrey Haick

Date: 1/29/2010 6:43:00 PM

You are an amazing woman, Dane Ann. He was a lucky man to have you in his life and to love him so. Goes to my favs. Peace and love, Audrey

Scarlett Sepulvado Anderson

Date: 1/29/2010 6:10:00 PM

What a powerful piece. I love the way you were able to still have lasting love through all the pain. Forgiveness is just as much for us. I really like this. Have a nice day Scarlett

Sara Kendrick

Date: 1/29/2010 5:01:00 PM

Your love was true and had staying power whether the other person measured up or not. Interesting presentation of love lost or betrayal. Keep the creative pen flowing. Sara

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 1/29/2010 1:42:00 PM

Dane im feeling you in pain and it makes me so sad, Hard is life when we love and get hurt by those we love most,yet i know your spirit, you will feel the sun again, I promise..Charma:)