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My Last Wish

My last wish is simple To lie beside you dear In eternity’s arms There to sleep so soundly Free from earthly alarms. My last wish is simple Told you in a whisper, Writ in my final will Just as you remember My promise to fulfill. My last wish is simple I could not make plainer, A six-syllable line In indelible ink, It will suffice just fine. My last wish is simple To lie beside you dear, Souls united in bliss Throughout eternity After our final kiss. written June 26, 2021 BRONZE WINNER All Poetry Contest Sponsored by Patterson-Mooney (anonymously judged)

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Jan Allison

Date: 6/27/2021 7:49:00 AM

Excellent ink, i love the rhyme and repeated line scheme, I have never seen this from before Milton and your fine example may tempt me to try, hugs Jan xx

L Milton Hankins
Date: 6/27/2021 8:50:00 AM

Thank you so much, Jan. I had not come across it either, but when I saw it in "Types of Poetry" thought I'd give it a try. I love the way it sounded, but those six-syllable lines are a bit to come up with. Best of luck to you, Jan. And, again, thanks for the compliment.

Beryl Edmonds

Date: 6/27/2021 3:32:00 AM

What a wonderful soothing thought, to lie with our dearest in eternity’s arms. A fantastic Monchielle form poem Milton… Belle

L Milton Hankins
Date: 6/27/2021 8:51:00 AM

Thank you, Belle, I'm so happy you enjoyed my poem. I always look forward to your reads and comments.

Joanna Daniel

Date: 6/27/2021 3:08:00 AM

This is the first time I am seeing this form, you have written well, Milton, your desire to be near your dear is really charming:)

L Milton Hankins
Date: 6/27/2021 8:52:00 AM

Thank you so much, Jo. It was the first time I tried it, too. You should give it a try.

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 6/26/2021 9:25:00 PM

"To lie beside you dear," a great last wish.

L Milton Hankins
Date: 6/26/2021 10:20:00 PM

My first whack at a Monchielle Stanza. I thought it came out pretty well. Glad to get your comment.

Sotto Poet

Date: 6/26/2021 6:09:00 PM

Very beautifully stated last will, sorrowful but full of hope and dedication to the loved one, I always wish you all the best and long and happy life, and may your will be realized.

L Milton Hankins
Date: 6/26/2021 6:25:00 PM

Thank you so much, dear Lasaad. Your comments are so kind and thoughtful and received in the same spirit.