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My Last Wish

My last wish is simple
To lie beside you dear
In eternity’s arms
There to sleep so soundly
Free from earthly alarms.

My last wish is simple
Told you in a whisper,
Writ in my final will
Just as you remember
My promise to fulfill.

My last wish is simple
I could not make plainer,
A six-syllable line
In indelible ink,
It will suffice just fine.

My last wish is simple
To lie beside you dear,
Souls united in bliss
Throughout eternity
After our final kiss.

written June 26, 2021

BRONZE WINNER
All Poetry Contest
Sponsored by Patterson-Mooney
(anonymously judged)

Copyright © L Milton Hankins | Year Posted 2021

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Jan Allison Date: 6/27/2021 7:49:00 AM Excellent ink, i love the rhyme and repeated line scheme, I have never seen this from before Milton and your fine example may tempt me to try, hugs Jan xx Login to Reply L Milton Hankins Date: 6/27/2021 8:50:00 AM Thank you so much, Jan. I had not come across it either, but when I saw it in "Types of Poetry" thought I'd give it a try. I love the way it sounded, but those six-syllable lines are a bit to come up with. Best of luck to you, Jan. And, again, thanks for the compliment.

Beryl Edmonds Date: 6/27/2021 3:32:00 AM What a wonderful soothing thought, to lie with our dearest in eternity’s arms. A fantastic Monchielle form poem Milton… Belle Login to Reply L Milton Hankins Date: 6/27/2021 8:51:00 AM Thank you, Belle, I'm so happy you enjoyed my poem. I always look forward to your reads and comments.

Joanna Daniel Date: 6/27/2021 3:08:00 AM This is the first time I am seeing this form, you have written well, Milton, your desire to be near your dear is really charming:) Login to Reply L Milton Hankins Date: 6/27/2021 8:52:00 AM Thank you so much, Jo. It was the first time I tried it, too. You should give it a try.

Caren Krutsinger Date: 6/26/2021 9:25:00 PM "To lie beside you dear," a great last wish. Login to Reply L Milton Hankins Date: 6/26/2021 10:20:00 PM My first whack at a Monchielle Stanza. I thought it came out pretty well. Glad to get your comment.

Sotto Poet Date: 6/26/2021 6:09:00 PM Very beautifully stated last will, sorrowful but full of hope and dedication to the loved one, I always wish you all the best and long and happy life, and may your will be realized. Login to Reply L Milton Hankins Date: 6/26/2021 6:25:00 PM Thank you so much, dear Lasaad. Your comments are so kind and thoughtful and received in the same spirit.