My Last Sunset

The triple sun set - what a sight,
And colours that I’d never seen,
My captors chirping their delight.
The triple sun set - what a sight,
Before the thirty moons of night.
My fellow captives: bones picked clean.
The triple sun set - what a sight,
And colours that I’d never seen.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2011

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Dietrich Avatar
February 2, 2012 at 10:37 PM
oh, this is funny. I was so excited to see that I'd found one of yours with no comment under it and then realized it was a double post (you must have accidentally posted this one twice) and MY comment was under THIS copy of it!!well, my friend, I will see you later. Time for me to finally get off. but I want to do a contest before I go I think.
Dietrich Avatar
January 28, 2012 at 8:54 PM
this is great imagery. I do love triolets. What inspired this one?
Wesley Avatar
August 7, 2011 at 9:27 PM
I'm beginning to see what a triolet is, love the repitition as it adds to the flow. Do did such a great write on this one Jack.
Long Avatar
August 7, 2011 at 3:36 PM
this was very good, nicely done with the form.. cory
Sweetheart Avatar
August 7, 2011 at 3:22 PM
OK luv so u do know this posted twice right? still good at second reading.. still wow..
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August 7, 2011 at 2:15 PM
Jack, I see this is quite similar to your other triolet. Did you post it twice? Wouldn't be surprised if you did so accidentally given all the technical problem on Poetry Soup. Love, carolyn
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