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My Last Poem, Revised

Will my last poem be something simple, like taking a final breath, or will I have time to write a much longer poem, an epic say, for every life ever lived has been epic, with courage and cowardice, heartbreak and newborn love, things found and things lost. It takes guts to live: bad people doing bad things, mother nature turning on us, giving a blue sky in the morning, and a tornado in the evening to suck up life. For 100,000 years 10,000 ills plagued us, wrecking bodies, and killing us like swatted flies... in the end, life murders everyone. Hard, hard life is--still, we love it at its best, when, like a pleasant dream, life brings happiness, hope. So I offer this as my last felt poem, more a prayer really: forgive us-- keep us-- and with that last breath, lead us home...lead us home. (revised 8/31/15)

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Date: 9/14/2022 7:24:00 AM
"It takes guts to live" - Bold statement. Entire poem is beautiful. Congratulations!
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L. J. Carber
Date: 9/15/2022 4:36:00 AM
Thank you, much appreciated!!!
Date: 1/28/2020 8:48:00 AM
Great poem, L.J. Congrats on your win! Charlie
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L. J. Carber
Date: 1/28/2020 12:12:00 PM
Thanks Charles, I'm glad you like it.
Date: 1/26/2020 8:31:00 AM
- Congratulations on your great winning poem in S.O. contest, L.J. :) - Have a lovely Sunday :) - // Anne-Lise :)
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L. J. Carber
Date: 1/26/2020 12:47:00 PM
Thanks Anne-Lise, I'm glad you liked it.
Date: 1/26/2020 5:24:00 AM
Congrats on your placement in the contest..
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L. J. Carber
Date: 1/26/2020 12:48:00 PM
Thank you,Silent One-- I feel honored!
Date: 12/8/2018 11:43:00 PM
Wow! Your poem is truly and deeply meaningful, beautiful and soulful, L.J. I love the depth of insight and emotion expressed. Congratulations on your wonderful win. ~Susan
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L. J. Carber
Date: 12/9/2018 6:50:00 AM
Thank you Susan, it is very much appreciated!
Date: 12/1/2018 11:17:00 PM
Enjoyed reading , LJ, congratulations on your win.
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L. J. Carber
Date: 12/2/2018 8:32:00 AM
Thanks Eve, much appreciated
Date: 12/1/2018 11:17:00 AM
- Many beautiful and deeply moving poems for this contest ... congratulations on your win, L.J.C. :) - hugs & happy weekend // Anne-Lise :)
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L. J. Carber
Date: 12/1/2018 6:35:00 PM
Thanks Anne, and have a good weekend as well (though since I retired, I seem to be on an eternal weekend!)
Date: 12/1/2018 11:13:00 AM
IF only life was so simple.. Congratulations on your placement in he contest..
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L. J. Carber
Date: 12/1/2018 6:34:00 PM
Thank you Silent One, I am honoured!
Date: 5/1/2018 10:11:00 AM
I have enjoyed so many of your poems. There are so many living gems. Thank you!
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L. J. Carber
Date: 5/1/2018 1:26:00 PM
Thank you, P.M.-- I am sincerely almost a bit 'giddy' hearing my late-in-life children called living gems-- because , you see, I never expected to be writing poems again in my late 60's (now 70's) after I stopped writing altogether in my early 30's. They come of their own accord-- from the soul?
Date: 8/31/2015 9:00:00 AM
Revisiting poems is remembering themes . Revisiting life is becoming conscious usually we are lived by life without knowing to come back to the song of the own self.Congrat.Welcome home.
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