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My Home Diurnal prayer, "Praise the breath in me." I plucked the honeysuckle of the Sun, And grouped it on the chamber windowpane, Save a trip during senses pair, smell, sight. Painted a bird, perceived that it held firm, Circumnavigated, adopts the sky, Possessed during flight, the heart from my niche, Acquired its course on some nest, where it stays, While rare wonderment, some docile sheet prop Against patterned desk, ambushed orbs boost plus Dips, an African safari relief, I perceive a remarkable presence Encompassing me, a baseball in mitts, Leather scents the room, succeeding flowers From morning growth, promptly eve waives the Sun, Seizing method, grooves of a desk melds, Cascading warm wetness lifts per young heart, Retreating through a room via some lights, The gods, Lunar succeeds Solar, trade blows, Constellate the beyond all Stargazers, Soon sights observe a stellar relief sky, Delinquent, charts the weightiness of lids, A sole soul fumble chambered memories, Nocturnal prayer, "I will be there soon." 2019 August 17 *3rd Place* My Home ~~Lu Loo

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Date: 8/20/2019 12:20:00 PM
Your poem is unique and thrilling to read William. This is impressive and very deserving of your podium win! Congratulations my friend. xxoo : )
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Date: 8/20/2019 2:21:00 PM
Thinking of mom with this write, rising to breathe, and before sleeping, she tells the departed that she'll be along shortly--Thnks so much again, and again... ~ Aloha William
Date: 8/20/2019 10:35:00 AM
Oh my, William- I don't know what to say...I meant to give you 2nd place for this beautiful poem. I apologize deeply. I just tried to change it and it's already completely locked. Please forgive me! I am so sorry. :( this poem touched me. The imagery and metaphors- great job Thank you for your participation and congrats on your placement. I was honored to read your poem :)-luloo
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Date: 8/20/2019 2:11:00 PM
Thank you, Petula Clark (Lulu--To Sir With Love) ~ Aloha William. (Sorry, *Exceeded 400...)
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Date: 8/20/2019 2:10:00 PM
I resonated mom's words, rising to praise the breath in her and before she slept, I'll be along shortly, (talking to the departed)--both done always in supplication/prayer. That's okay, and I hope you don't mind the title change, as the coupling for me when I wrote it, was myself talking with mom using her words at both times of the day
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