My Hearts Window Pain

the tears come down like acid rain etching a hole through the soul of my hearts window pain 
blinding me with burning tears of pain searing my eyes as they drain branding me with scars 
that will always remain drenching me in a torturous pain like hot molten lava coursing 
through my veins blood filled tears fall like rain down upon my broken window of shame as 
broken bloody shards spear my heart ripping an tearing it apart from the inside out leaving 
an empty an hollowed out shell to turn to dust an fade away
Copyright © | Year Posted 2009

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Anymore Avatar
April 26, 2009 at 11:08 AM
Great metaphoric use but it's pretty emo
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April 22, 2009 at 8:13 AM
Woah! I had to stop for a moment. This is a powerful poem. Congratulations on having your poem featured this week. God bless you. Always, Dane PS I think this form is called narrative poetry form??? I'm not sure, though. I'm trying to learn, too. I hope you don't mind this comment. I would like some help in the poetry form area, myself.
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April 21, 2009 at 8:23 AM
congrats Fawn on being featured this week. Vince
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April 21, 2009 at 1:43 AM
Congratulations on adeserved feature, kindest thoughts,Anna-Marie.
Winter Avatar
April 20, 2009 at 4:39 PM
Congrats on your excellent featured write of the week. Love, Shar
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April 20, 2009 at 9:45 AM
Congratulation on your poem featured this week. May you find solace inthe friendships your honest read invite. Love and smiles
Christian Avatar
April 20, 2009 at 6:37 AM
wow congratulations on your poem being featured, God bless from diane
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April 19, 2009 at 9:39 PM
Fawn, congrats on being featured this week...Raul
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April 19, 2009 at 7:43 PM
Dear Fawn,Congratulations on YOUR Featured POEM "My Hearts Window Pain" such a dark and melancholy Write very well Penned YOURS ALWAYS...HG
Ehigiator Avatar
April 19, 2009 at 5:42 PM
This is written beautifully,Very deep and very sad...Congratulations on your feature...I shall read more, GB Best Wishes Always, Tyesha
Nutter Avatar
April 19, 2009 at 2:16 PM
Very well done and the words touch you deep. Congratulations on being featured.
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April 19, 2009 at 1:47 PM
Creative use of imagery to convey your thoughts. Congratulations on having your poem featured. Wishing you continued success with your writing. Karen
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April 19, 2009 at 12:57 PM
Fawn, congratulations on your poem being featured this week. Mine is also featured this week. Looking forward to reading more of yours. Ernilando
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April 19, 2009 at 12:31 PM
Congratulations on being featuered this week....This is a sad but powerful piece...I am going to add you to my favorites!!!! and read more of yours....Good Day Friend!!!! Rhonda Kay
Jordan Avatar
April 19, 2009 at 9:41 AM
Fawn - Congratulations on your poetry being featured this week, God Bless, mj
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