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My Hearts Window Pain

the tears come down like acid rain etching a hole through the soul of my hearts window pain blinding me with burning tears of pain searing my eyes as they drain branding me with scars that will always remain drenching me in a torturous pain like hot molten lava coursing through my veins blood filled tears fall like rain down upon my broken window of shame as broken bloody shards spear my heart ripping an tearing it apart from the inside out leaving an empty an hollowed out shell to turn to dust an fade away

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009




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Date: 4/26/2009 11:08:00 AM
Great metaphoric use but it's pretty emo
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Date: 4/22/2009 8:13:00 AM
Woah! I had to stop for a moment. This is a powerful poem. Congratulations on having your poem featured this week. God bless you. Always, Dane PS I think this form is called narrative poetry form??? I'm not sure, though. I'm trying to learn, too. I hope you don't mind this comment. I would like some help in the poetry form area, myself.
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Date: 4/21/2009 8:23:00 AM
congrats Fawn on being featured this week. Vince
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Date: 4/21/2009 1:43:00 AM
Congratulations on adeserved feature, kindest thoughts,Anna-Marie.
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Date: 4/20/2009 4:39:00 PM
Congrats on your excellent featured write of the week. Love, Shar
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Date: 4/20/2009 9:45:00 AM
Congratulation on your poem featured this week. May you find solace inthe friendships your honest read invite. Love and smiles
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Date: 4/20/2009 6:37:00 AM
wow congratulations on your poem being featured, God bless from diane
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Date: 4/19/2009 9:39:00 PM
Fawn, congrats on being featured this week...Raul
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Date: 4/19/2009 7:43:00 PM
Dear Fawn,Congratulations on YOUR Featured POEM "My Hearts Window Pain" such a dark and melancholy Write very well Penned YOURS ALWAYS...HG
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Date: 4/19/2009 5:42:00 PM
This is written beautifully,Very deep and very sad...Congratulations on your feature...I shall read more, GB Best Wishes Always, Tyesha
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Date: 4/19/2009 2:16:00 PM
Very well done and the words touch you deep. Congratulations on being featured.
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Date: 4/19/2009 1:47:00 PM
Creative use of imagery to convey your thoughts. Congratulations on having your poem featured. Wishing you continued success with your writing. Karen
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Date: 4/19/2009 12:57:00 PM
Fawn, congratulations on your poem being featured this week. Mine is also featured this week. Looking forward to reading more of yours. Ernilando
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Date: 4/19/2009 12:31:00 PM
Congratulations on being featuered this week....This is a sad but powerful piece...I am going to add you to my favorites!!!! and read more of yours....Good Day Friend!!!! Rhonda Kay
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Date: 4/19/2009 9:41:00 AM
Fawn - Congratulations on your poetry being featured this week, God Bless, mj
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